Pei Zhiqing from Yifu Middle School

"Have you seen how the water of the Yellow River left heaven and entered the ocean, and never came back? Didn't you see the lovely hair in the bright mirror of the high room? Although it was silky black in the morning, it turned into snow at night? " As Li Bai said in his poem, life may be a magnificent page or a short and changeable journey. But I want to say: support the life of the sun for me.

Since ancient times, Shang Yang has always advocated political reform and pursued reform tirelessly, which can lead to "dismemberment". Qu Yuan was loyal to his country and dared to speak out, but he was devastated and threw himself into the river. Copernicus put forward "Heliocentrism", but he was regarded as a madman and was displaced all his life; Petofi fought for freedom and independence, but could not escape the evil spear in the dark.

Although ambitious at that time, it was not affirmed. Therefore, they can only defend the truth with their lives and let anger light the torch of life. The light of the torch finally illuminates the door of truth, and the power of the torch finally destroys the feudal shackles. Now, they are admired by future generations because of their reappearance of their famous names. Although it is only a flash of burning, we should do our best to shine and heat.

The sun is the embodiment of hope, youth, beauty and ideal. Many heroes are shattered in the pursuit of this incarnation, because they have the life to support the sun ... give me the life to support the sun!

Mao Zedong led the people's uprising and made pride of chinese the master of China again-so the people and country of China will be remembered by history forever; Deng Xiaoping brought order out of chaos, turned the tide, and injected new vitality into China with the new concept of "reform and opening up"-so China changed its face; Kong Fansen shed blood for Tibet, and became a public servant of the people without any regrets-Tibet has flourished as a result. They serve the people, hold up the sun of life for them and sprinkle hope and happiness for the people. ...

We are still 16 years old, and we still have a long way to go. We know too little about life. We need time, spirit and efforts to temper ourselves and become China's new hope. To this end, I request: hold up the sun of life for me, and I will make the land of China incomparably brilliant. ...

Hold up the life of the sun for me ...

Comments: Young authors, who have deeply absorbed the ideological spirit of the great men of our nation, are ambitious and want to make a difference, calling on themselves to have the power to hold up the sun and let their life value shine forever. This article is fluent in language and makes good use of literary classics, but it is not clear enough. However, as an examination composition, it is already valuable!

(Instructor: Zheng)

2. Give me warm fatherly love

Zhang Shuhao from Shaw Middle School.

Perhaps it is because we are ignorant and don't realize the emotion given by tears, so that we ignore the heartbreaking thoughts of our loved ones; Maybe we are always busy and never realize the emotion contained in the cup of warm water at hand to repay each other, even if it is just a simple greeting. -Inscription

On a foggy morning, gentle raindrops and chilly autumn wind beat the leaves. On the mountain road, you can only hear the friction between raindrops and air and the sound of raindrops hitting leaves.

"Cough, cough-",a few sparse coughs broke the silence in the mountains, and also broke the tranquility of the son's heart lake, rippling back and forth in the son's heart lake, with layers of ripples that could not be dispersed. ...

Looking at his father's delicate hunchback, his son felt an indescribable feeling, pouring out and infiltrating into the humid air. The father's hands are full of cocoons and his son's daily necessities for school. Even the light schoolbag, the father insists on carrying his son on his shoulders. My son has nothing in his hand except an umbrella. The father gave his son his water shoes as early as when he set out, saying that he was afraid that his son would wet his pants and would let him

The rain is getting heavier and heavier, and the grass on the roadside has faded from the summer green, and the color is barren enough to hurt the eyes. Raindrops piled up on the leaves, enjoying the warmth brought by barefoot dad. The father broke a branch from the roadside and photographed the crystal beads on the leaves, perhaps for fear of getting his son's water shoes wet.

The son wants to go forward and talk to his father to ease his father's coldness and the silence in the mountains. When he just leaned in, his mouth moved and stopped. The fog was heavy and the road was slippery. He couldn't bear to distract his father. He stopped and looked at his father's back, and tears kept spinning in his eyes. ...

The sparse cough just now has been echoing in the mountains. Frequent heart-wrenching coughs also hurt my son's heart. Tears can no longer stop, and the tears of his son slide down his face silently. He can no longer restrain his inner feelings. Father seems to have sensed something and turned around; My son leans on his umbrella, not wanting his father to see his tears, which brings his father some unnecessary worries.

"Hold the umbrella straight, don't get wet, and don't risk-cough, feel-cough, cough." Father coughed and labored, his voice trembling, perhaps frozen by the cold wind.

On a muddy road, my father slipped and fell backwards. The son threw an umbrella and strode forward to hold his dying father. The son's tears also entered his father's eyes. The father wiped his son's eyes with his hand and gave him a knowing smile.

The rain soaked his father's face, but could not drown his smile. ...

The long mountain road is finally over. The continuous autumn rain seems to have been moved and stopped.

After a short farewell, the son stood quietly, watching his gradually blurred father disappear in the cold wind.

This time, my son finally understood that love is on the road.

My son is me. My father gave me the warmest love. ...

Comments: It can be said that this is a very beautiful essay. The author can finish it in the examination room thanks to his long-term brewing of this story all his life. As can be seen from the article, the author's conception and tailoring of this story are extremely clever, which is one of his great writing skills. The second performance is that the author's grasp of details is extremely delicate; The third performance is that the author's use of language is excellent, which makes the inner feelings flow! The warm scene sent by my father in the rain, accompanied by details, deeply entered the author's heart and warmed the reader's heart! (Instructor: Dai)

3. Give me books to extend my life

Zhang Weibin, instructor of Xiamen No.6 Middle School: Feng Yanhua.

When winter comes and summer goes, decades pass in a hurry, and a person's life is over. In the fleeting journey of life, what have you gained and created to make your life continue again? How should you choose?

Some people think that gold and silver jewelry or antique calligraphy and painting can prolong life; Some people think that what can prolong life is wealth. I don't think so. A good book can prolong your life and sublimate your soul.

Yes, books are the most valuable things in the world. People know Li Shizhen because he wrote Compendium of Materia Medica and made great contributions in the medical field. People praised Sima Qian because he wrote Historical Records, which provided rich materials for China's historical records. People miss Mr. Lu Xun, because he abandoned medicine and followed literature, which aroused the determination of countless Chinese sons and daughters to resist foreign invaders ... They are remembered by people, because books and their lives are eternal, and because the value of their dedication is infinite.

Is it possible to prolong life only by writing books? No, not at all. Reading is expanding your life.

I studied math and physics, and there are thousands of images, all of which are the same, but I always come back to one. The test is your insight and quick thinking.

I read history books, I know the prosperity of Hou Guoxing, and I also learn from the success or failure of my predecessors. I used the lessons of my predecessors to warn myself not to make the same mistake again. Reading history makes my time and space infinitely extended and my knowledge keeps growing.

When reading a poem, I have mixed feelings of sadness and joy, and the characters have mixed feelings. A drizzly, lingering spring rain, like a thread, falls like a dream, which reminds me of the scene of "listening to the spring rain all night in a small building and selling apricot flowers in an alley" in the Ming Dynasty. ......

Reading not only increased my knowledge and experience, but also raised my life taste to a higher level. My life, my life, and my soul have all been washed and cultivated by wisdom, and will be more sparkling and bright.

Some people think that reading needs three things: heart, eyes and mouth; However, Du Fu said, "Reading is like writing" ... No matter how you study, as long as you read, think and meet with your heart, you will get unexpected gains!

Books have given me an extension of my life. ......

4. Give me a history lesson

Xiamen No.6 Middle School Bailongwei

China has a long history of 5,000 years, and the Yangtze River stretches as far as the eye can see. History is all-encompassing and profound. I am a history fan, I am a history fan.

Emperor Taizong once said: "With copper as a mirror, you can dress your clothes;" Taking history as a mirror, we can know the rise and fall; Learn from others, and you will know when you get lost. "History is a mirror, it will guide you how to get along with others. In this bizarre place, who can be childlike, see through addiction, have a broad and noble heart, take history as a mirror, and thus go to the extreme of life?

Throughout the ages, many literati have sacrificed their lives for righteousness. "People are inherently mortal, either heavier than Mount Tai or lighter than a feather." -On the shore of Yishui, Jing Ke bid farewell to Yan Taizi Dan and set foot on the Qin Dynasty. On the banks of the Wujiang River, besieged on all sides, the overlord of the place of Chu was heartbroken. In "What if there is danger and fear?" Yu Ji waved her sword and jumped the one last dance of her life. Qu Yuan, a courtier who sang songs by the Miluo River, hid his face and sighed, asked questions in the air, and lived in a temple, not for the people, not for the people, not for the king. The great loneliness of life was suppressed in his heart and rushed to his chest, making the poet jump into the river and commit suicide; "The wind is rustling, the river is cold, and the strong man is gone forever", which makes me know how to be a valuable person.

There is also Lin Zexu, who said, "Why avoid every cloud has a silver lining when you are greedy for life and death?" : Like Wen Tianxiang, from ancient times to the present, he has never died, leaving his heart in history; Just like Lu Xun said, "bow your head and be a willing ox", all these tell us that we should have a childlike innocence and love our country with all our blood.

There were many villains in Ming and Qing Dynasties. In this country, in this case, Tang Bohu didn't go with the flow. Although he was poor all his life, he was very sensible. His romantic love, his charm, and its elegance tell people to be an upright person. "The full moon shines on four Fiona Fang. He is disciplined, long and short, and he can bend and stretch."

The world is red and purple, just like passing clouds. Confucius said, "Eat less and drink more, lean on it and enjoy it. Being unjust and rich is like a cloud to me. " This is a kind of happiness in life. Li Yu, the queen of the Southern Tang Dynasty, once said with emotion, "How much sorrow can there be, just like a river flowing eastward", and she no longer indulged in the secular world, which made the country ruin, so it was unbearable.

Let's learn from history, create a better future, improve ourselves and strive for the great rejuvenation of the Chinese nation.

Comments: Talking about heroes has always been an eternal topic. But taking history as a mirror, it is more necessary for us to affirm the value of people with lofty ideals from an objective standpoint. The clever author introduces the theme with the famous sentences of Emperor Taizong, and rationally evaluates Jing Ke, Xiang Yu and Qu Yuan who are full of life value, Lin Zexu, Wen Tianxiang and Lu Xun who are patriotic with a pure heart, and Li Yu who knows real life. Looking at history is the basis of our contribution to the rejuvenation of the Chinese nation. However, if the author can refer to the central content of the whole article with a subtitle, and then quote the above figures separately, the article will be more organized and clear. Instructor: Feng Yanhua.

5. Give me a peaceful heart.

Xiamen 6 th middle school Lin

Laozi Ceng Yun: "If you don't want to be quiet, the world will decide for itself." Standing on the road, this sentence clearly shows the importance of silence. As a result, all the literati throughout the ages shouted silence. "Unless you are indifferent, you won't have a clear ambition; Unless you are quiet, you won't go far "is the connotation of silence." "Don't rejoice in things, don't grieve for yourself" is the essence of quietness.

Silence is a kind of rational wisdom.

Time flies, how many impetuous people rush back and forth in the world, seemingly busy and promising, but in fact they have already lost their peace of mind. In fact, what they have accumulated in the quiet process is their understanding of the world and cultivated an indifferent and calm attitude towards life. In the face of everything, they have already had a panoramic view, and they have realized something in their hearts, and they are silent with those who are suffering from loss.

Give me a quiet heart and let me embrace life with wisdom!

Silence is a peaceful relief.

When you are tired and tired of the world, does your deepest call want to call you back to the original starting point of your life? People are like this, but the best way to escape is peaceful liberation. Thinking of Su Shi, maybe his career is bumpy, maybe his beloved wife's future is uncertain, maybe his fate is ill-fated, but he still calmly threw a paper boat full of dissatisfaction with his fate into the river and died with the water, leaving the rest of his life in the rivers and seas. Accompanied by misty rain, Su Shi's quietness is no longer just a bright spot in history, but also allows us to listen to the true meaning of life. Quiet is to give up the secular world peacefully after life experience, and then have the essence of life.

Give me a quiet heart and let me release all the success or failure peacefully!

Quiet is an elegant enjoyment.

When the night is dark, make a cup of fragrant tea, take a shallow sip, let the tea smell linger between your teeth, close your eyes and feel fresh and natural; Or standing by the river, with long hair fluttering, chanting poems, watching the grass and the rain, and watching the mysterious Tonamiyama, this is also an aura. It is true that quietness brings us a unique vision of appreciating the elegance of nature, which is romantic and warm. Between pleasure, there is calmness and tranquility. If you are quiet, isn't it more comfortable to grope and crawl in the vast sea of people?

Give me a quiet heart and let me enjoy the elegance of nature!

Silence is a kind of wisdom, a kind of liberation and a kind of enjoyment. In the extreme of life, it bid farewell to the clarity and transparency of the soul and stagnated the generosity of life, which is the so-called sacred purpose of life.

If one day, give me this quiet heart, give it to you, give it to him, and everyone will face life calmly, won't a harmonious society come naturally? I hope and expect … give me a quiet heart!

Comments: The article is based on Laozi's "Don't want to be quiet, the world decides for itself." It proves the importance of a calm philosophy of life to one's attitude towards life. With smooth brushwork and clear thinking, the author embodies a quiet philosophy of life from three parallel angles: rationality, peaceful liberation and elegance. Concise language shows the author's usual intention of language accumulation. However, everything is just right if he can make a proper language.

6. Give me some punctuation marks

Chen Yayun from Tang Hong Middle School.

Life is a long road, sometimes tortuous, sometimes flat and comfortable. Among them, we need to decorate it with punctuation marks to make our life more perfect.

When I am tired, please give me a comma.

Comma means pause. From the moment we are born, we must learn to walk, babble and speak. When we finish learning these things, a lot of books are in front of us-we start to learn to write again, and then there are a series of texts, a lot of homework and endless exams. I am really tired! At this time, please give me a comma, let me have a rest and reserve my energy to finish my future chapter.

Please give me quotation marks when I understand.

Quoting means enlightenment. From the moment we were born, it was our parents who worked day and night for us! When we get good grades, the people who work hard for us are teachers! When we encounter difficulties, the people who encourage us are friends! Now, I understand: I know how to repay my mother with a healthy body; Know how to repay teachers with excellent results; I know how to repay my friends with a knowing smile. I really get it. Please give me quotation marks to elicit my sincere return and words of thanks.

Please give me the ellipsis when I am unhappy.

Ellipsis indicates tolerance. We must treat all kinds of social occasions with tolerance. Don't be sad about the paper covered with red crosses, omit some! In the face of parents' ignorant scolding, don't get angry and omit some! In the face of students' uninformed ridicule, don't care, omit some! In the face of all the unhappiness, please give me the ellipsis, so that I can forget these unhappiness!

Please give me a full stop when I succeed.

A period means perfection. We have been working hard. When we are lost, we try our best to make ourselves happy. When we fail, we try to make ourselves full of confidence; When we are angry, we try to make ourselves happy; When we succeed, we try not to get carried away. When all our efforts are successful, please give me a full stop, make it more perfect and make all our efforts finally satisfactory.

If you are full of emotions, draw a straight exclamation point in your life.

Life, because of these punctuation marks, will not deviate from the track, because with these punctuation marks, our life is more perfect.

Comments: This paper skillfully uses metaphor to link various attitudes towards life situations with punctuation marks, which is novel in conception and profound in content. Secondly, this paper has clear thinking, echoing from beginning to end and complete structure. In language, it uses a variety of sentence patterns flexibly, among which the well-structured parallelism sentence is particularly prominent. It is worthy of being a masterpiece in the examination room. (Instructor: Su)

7. Give me a cup of tea

Yucai Middle School Li Yanting

I like drinking tea, including "Longjing tea, chrysanthemum tea ...", but only that cup of tea makes me memorable. That cup of tea changed me ...

It was a long summer vacation, cicadas kept chirping in the branches, and the weather was really hot. I kept clicking the thread with small scissors in my hand. After three days in the factory, it can be called "life is worse than death". The workers kept making clothes, and the noise of the machine and the squeaking noise of the fan made me fidget, and my heart felt like a fire was burning. People in the whole factory are sweating profusely. Although this is not as bad as "the sun is shining on the back", the workers are "exhausted and unaware of the heat." Suddenly, the radio rang and informed me that there was a meeting. I stopped my work and hurried to the meeting. "Wow, that's cool!" The air conditioner blew during the meeting, which froze the fire in my heart. I couldn't help crying. It is because my mother told me to go to the factory to hone, that I am so miserable. The meeting said that I would stay up late because I had to catch the goods. "No way! Just entering the factory, I will stay up late soon. " I've been angry all the time. The night comes too fast, all the lights are on at night, and the factory is brightly lit. It's going to be a tough night for me. It's already four or five in the morning. I can't take it anymore. My eyelids have been resisting. Finally, I didn't hold on. I sleep on the table. I opened my eyes when the first ray of sunshine came into my eyes from the window in the morning. At this time, I saw a shocking scene. She has a haggard face and messy hair. She kept looking at her work all the time. I called "Mom" and she stopped working and came back to see me. She said to me: "I didn't sleep well all night, go home and sleep!" You have a holiday in the morning. " At this time, I found that my mother's bright big eyes became dim and bright, and I was no longer sleepy.

It was my mother who gave me a cup of tea for my soul and a cup of tea that changed me. I understand that it is not easy for my mother to earn money to educate me.

[Comment] The author of this article writes from his personal holiday life, and can use environmental description to contrast the situation, and can use psychological and appearance description techniques when portraying characters. The angle of material selection is novel, comparing my mother's love for "me" to a cup of tea. The end of this article is too hasty. If we can discuss this matter a little, the center of the article can be further sublimated. Instructor: Cai Ganzhi.

8. Give me a choice

Yang Kongrui of Xiamen Haicang Affiliated School of Beijing Normal University Tutor: Peng Lizhen

Like a fairy flower in Yuen Long, like a water lotus, I have a peerless appearance and extraordinary talent. However, fate gave me a miserable life.

When I left my father for Beijing at the age of five, I was given an affectionate heart under the fence. The flowers in front of the court are not as bright and bright as I am, but once they are scattered, it is difficult to find them again. How many times I looked at the flowers with tears and lamented who was pitying them, and I saw my own beautiful and unfortunate shadow.

The delicate begonia can borrow a wisp of plum blossom soul even if it steals the pear core for three minutes. How can you be shy and silent? Just as I am proud of the aloofness of Chrysanthemum, you are proud of the aloofness of who you are hiding from, just as bloom is late. However, you can at least remember Tao Qian who was picking chrysanthemums under the hedge in my dream, and where my bosom friend was looking at the flying catkins in the rolling world of mortals? In a flash, I was in a trance. "Where am I from?"

However, the tears dried up, the spring passed, the flowers fell, and the night fainted. In the Xiaoxiang Pavilion with mottled bamboo shadows, I live a life of 360 days a year, and the wind, sword and frost force me. In the long night, I endured sleeping under the blue light, and the window was not warm.

However, I have no regrets all my life!

If I had another choice, I would still choose to bloom like a flower. Even if I am so ordinary and humble, I will still bloom without hesitation. Even if I have been smashed into mud, at least I have bloomed proudly.

If you give me another choice, I will still choose to pursue happiness and meet him in the afterlife. I am happy for him, worried about him, crazy about him, and shed tears for him all my life. Even if life is a tragedy, why not pursue it tirelessly on the road of life?

If you give me another choice, I will still choose Daiyu in the afterlife. ...

9. Give me a glass of wine

Zeng Jingchao of Xiamen Haicang Affiliated School of Beijing Normal University: Xiong Chuanfeng

Holding a book of poems, I paced back and forth in the study. These poems are either melancholy, bold, implicit or affectionate. All kinds of feelings gather in the chest and turn into drops of wine. Looking out of the window, I can't help shouting in my heart-give me a glass of wine!

Give me a glass of wine and let Wang Wei and I drink it in the parting hostel. The morning rain in Weicheng is a step to leave people in a hurry, drifting away and falling to the local conditions and customs of Xiangyang. The drizzle sweeps away the dust, but it can't sweep away the sadness. The glass is still there, but there is no one. The wine that has just entered the throat is still fragrant. Wang Wei, let me have a drink with you to relive this long-standing friendship.

Give me a glass of wine and let me raise my glass to Li Bai on the bright moon night. Holding a cup in the left hand and a sword in the right hand, the gorgeous sword dance can only be put down helplessly. Under the moon of "Until, raise my cup, I ask the bright moon, bring me my shadow, let us three", your shadow is hazy, like loneliness, slowly elongated. Uncle grinds ink, lux takes off his boots. What about the sober people and forgotten sages who have existed since ancient times, and a heart that despises the powerful? Let's raise our glasses, Li Bai.

Give me a glass of wine and let me taste homesickness with Fan Zhongyan in the military account. Ran Yan Gobi is so desolate, day after day, when can I return to my hometown thousands of miles away, bearing whose thoughts, and pour the bitter and incomprehensible homesickness wine.

Give me a glass of wine, let me consider the different moods of the literati who have long passed away, and let me taste the mellow wine in the poem.