Composition evaluation, Band 4, 1 1. The works are ingenious, concise and fluent, imaginative, bold and innovative, novel and strange, and fascinating to read.
2. imaginative and innovative. First of all, let me introduce myself. The following articles are concise in language and humorous in style.
3. The article is not long, but the process is clearly described, and the activities of the characters are concrete, real, vivid and interesting. The full text is compact and complete, and the writing is smooth.
The plot is lively and interesting, the narrative is clear and complete, and it also shows the author's intelligence and wit, full of family life interest, and his writing is smooth and vivid.
You are very good at grasping the characteristics of things and describing them in detail, which shows that … emotion permeates between words.
6. The article is very convincing and thought-provoking. From the point of view of writing, the plot is vivid and the article is ups and downs, which is very enlightening to read.
7. The theme is concise, profound and powerful, and shocking.
8. The use of accurate and rigorous words, plain and natural language, personification and other rhetorical devices makes the article even more icing on the cake.
9. The main feature of this composition is that it narrates specific details, describes vivid feelings, and uses rhetorical devices such as metaphor and personification to write … vividly, expressing … love for ….
10. The full-text language is vivid and accurate, and the plot is wonderful and tortuous, which seems to bring readers into a happy paradise and make people smile. The full text is easy to understand and interesting.
According to the composition evaluation, my favorite flower in Grade 4 and Grade 2 is not enchanting peach blossom, but simple and elegant lily, quiet lilac ... but muddy but not stained lotus.
People say that lotus symbolizes innocence, purity and noble character. There are many poems about lotus flowers: the next day, the lotus leaves are infinitely bright, and the lotus flowers reflect different colors in the sun; Lotus Palace looks like a beauty makeup, and the lotus leaf is as cool as jade.
The colors of lotus flowers are particularly beautiful, some are white, some are pink in white, and some are light green in pink. Lotus has charming fragrance and noble appearance, just like a slim girl.
A breeze blew gently, and the lotus flowers in the pool were dancing. Lotus still has many gestures, some of which are in bud and seem a little shy; Some covered their cheeks with green umbrellas; Some are heroic and vigorous.
The lotus at sunrise is the most beautiful in a day. There are many dewdrops on the pink lotus, just like sparkling pearls.
Lotus is not only beautiful in appearance, but also has many uses. After the lotus is in full bloom, the white petals reveal the yellow core, and the bright yellow shower head is smiling. Lotus seeds in lotus can be used as medicine. Bitter, but it can clear fire and reduce summer heat. ...
I like lotus flowers because they are muddy but not dirty. It is a well-deserved "hibiscus in water".
The teacher's comments on this article used a lot of rhetorical devices to describe lotus flowers, with fluent language and beautiful words. Adding ancient poems to the text is even more charming. "It's really like writing a poem"! It seems that you must have read a lot of literary works to make the article so rich.
Composition evaluation 3. The fourth-grade students, wearing beautiful white dresses, are weak in appearance, but they have the tenacious belief of "burning themselves and illuminating others"-from Florence Nightingale, the frontline of the Crimean war in the19th century, to the ordinary nurses at the forefront of the fight against SARS today, this precious spirit has been passed down from generation to generation, making immortal contributions to human life and health. Angels in white is a heartfelt admiration for them. Sweat soaked the thick isolation suit, racing against time to save patients-in the battlefield without smoke, they spent their holidays like this. Leave the danger to yourself and exchange your health for the health of more people. They are carrying forward the glorious tradition of "love, patience, carefulness and responsibility" to treat every patient. The "White Guards" have great admiration for them.
People are destined to cherish this unusual memory!
Maybe we can't see their faces clearly under big masks, maybe we can't send flowers directly to them, maybe we can't send heartfelt wishes in person, but people won't forget Ye Xin, a hospital nurse who died in the front line of fighting against SARS, Jingjing, a nurse who made up "beautiful lies" to comfort her parents, and all the nurses who fought against ruthless diseases with selfless sacrifice! This is a collective memory, a shocking force, a strong belief that inspires people to finally defeat SARS, and a tempered and strengthened national spirit!
On the occasion of "5. 12 International Nurses' Day", let's send holiday wishes to all angels in white, and pay our highest respects to all the white guards who fought in the front line!
Comments: This is an article about people. In a parallel way, the author lists the angels with selfless sacrifice spirit in The Man in White. Although the language of the article is unpretentious, it is sincere and expresses the author's admiration and praise for angels in white.
Band 4 composition evaluation 4 1. You are very good at observing life and can keenly capture meaningful moments; You are a student with great potential.
2. The language of the article is fluent, which also shows the teacher's feelings. You are the teacher's bosom friend. I hope we can learn from each other and collect a bunch of fragrant flowers in the garden of literature.
Sorry, the teacher didn't understand this paragraph. Would you like to explain it to the teacher again? Thank you.
Your handwriting is neat and beautiful. Teachers should learn from you. If the material selection of the article is novel, it will definitely complement the writing style. what do you reckon ?
5. Great! Your article reproduces the simplicity and frankness of the northeast people, which makes readers feel refreshed. The language is extremely fluent, and the use of synaesthesia is particularly clever. Your writing style is conquering and attractive. Work hard and create more glory!
Careful observation, vivid description, ingenious arrangement, flexible description, relaxed style, correct theme, meticulous performance, novel story and clear text
Elegant language, vivid narration, lyrical narration, concise and to the point, fresh, smooth and natural taste.
Vivid writing, picturesque description, vivid description, beautiful sentences, vivid description and rigorous structure.
The materials are novel, the writing style is excellent, the structure is rigorous, the narrative is detailed, the content is substantial, the writing is fluent, the writing is free and easy, the interest is meaningful, the layout is novel, and the text is concise.
Clear organization, rigorous structure, vivid and interesting notes, sad and moving, touching words, true feelings, touching.
Composition evaluation, Band 4 (5 1) makes full use of language, action and psychological description to make things concrete and vivid.
2) Briefly describe the antecedents and pave the way.
3) Highlights of primary school scenery composition evaluation Highlights of primary school scenery composition evaluation
4) Dialogue or some psychological description can be added to this part.
5) It is more appropriate to change … to …,
6) Naturally connecting the preceding with the following, the detailed description highlights the quality of the characters and is touching.
7) Describe the scenery in the narrative, measure people by yourself and compare with each other.
8) personified language makes the article more vivid.
9) The description of the appearance is very interesting, which highlights that the lovely introduction ... has been integrated into one's own thoughts and is infectious.
10) Add character behaviors to make the picture vivid.
1 1) This paragraph is redundant, so it is better to delete it to make the article more concise.
12) Use wonderful imagination and subtle metaphors.
13) personification and metaphor full of childlike interest make the article shine.
14) This description is very touching to read.
15) The psychological description is exquisite and the figurative sentences are used properly.
16) The use of parallelism names adds a lot of color to the article.
17) has an attractive taste and profound artistic conception.
18) The metaphor is apt and the words are vivid.
19) ... told us in a relaxed and pleasant tone, which is unforgettable.
20) The ending is implicit and points out the theme.
Composition evaluation, grade four, in hope primary school, class two, grade three. There is a bad boy. He doesn't have a good friend in the class, and nobody cares about him. Everyone called him a bad boy because he either hit people or called names, and even his own table was painted in a mess.
The bad boy has a desk, and the desk is full of pictures drawn by the bad boy, almost becoming a "Xiaohua Mall". But only desks are willing to make friends with bad children.
One day, after the second class at school, the desk quickly stopped the bad boy and said to him, "Friend, would you please stop scribbling on my face?" Bad children don't answer the desk, turn a deaf ear to what the desk says, pretend nothing happened, leave the desk depressed and sad, and don't know who to complain to. At this time, the bad boy's deskmate Xiaoli came to comfort the desk. She gently said to the desk, "friend, don't pay attention to him, as long as everyone cares about you." In this way, the mood of the desk stabilized.
A few days later, the desk couldn't help it. I wrote a letter to the bad boy, which read:
Dear friends, please don't doodle on my face. I also have my own life! Do you get angry if someone doodles on your face? ...
When the bad boy saw this letter, he felt very ashamed. He thought, yes! If someone scribbles on my face, I will be very painful and ugly. So he decided to get rid of his bad habits and be a good boy. Gradually, he stopped fighting with children and destroying public property. Children like to be friends with him and get along with him.
Taking the little girl as a whole, the brief commentary describes the process that the little girl didn't have a good friend at first, and then she was able to live in harmony with other children. The characters are prominent and the plot is tortuous. This is a good work.
Composition evaluation, band 4 7 1. The layout of the article is concise and fair, and the author's understanding of the original text is also very profound and thorough. The full-text language is forceful and hit the floor, which makes people feel excited and excited.
2. The article is detailed, orderly, vivid and meticulous, which is a masterpiece.
3. The full text has a bright rhythm, fresh language, and is always full of humor and fun to read.
4. The full-text narrative meets, with simple language and sincere feelings.
The tone of the whole article is relaxed and humorous, and it is interesting and fascinating to read.
6. The author is clever in conception, good at choosing the opening point, and his writing is ups and downs, which is intriguing.
7. There are many wonderful sentences in the full text, which add some literary interest to the article.
8. The article is miscellaneous and steady, but it can be detailed and appropriate, and the key points are prominent.
9. This article is rich and beneficial to the atmosphere of …, and describes the key points of the article delicately and truly.
10, realism, contains simple and profound philosophy, which makes people energetic and impulsive.
1 1. This article is full of lofty sentiments. Reading between the lines, we can understand the little author's love for …. The full text is clear and the sentences are circular.
12, the case narrative is vivid and detailed, and the viewpoint is meaningful, which is in the same strain as the previous metaphor. Finally, the author expressed his feelings about ... in a few words, on impulse.
13, the article is coherent and forms a complete image.
14, the language of the article is fresh and vivid, the appearance can grasp the important characteristics of things, and the length is short and lean, which is worth reading.
15, this article is vivid and rich in content, fresh in language and peculiar and fair in layout.
One morning, my mother and I went to the vegetable market to buy meat. I saw a big man standing behind a meat stall. He is tall and burly, with a bright smile on his face, greeting customers passing by. I was just about to rush over to buy meat when my mother pulled me and said, "Wait, wait and see."
Soon, an old man with gray temples came to buy meat. The big fellow smiled like a flower on his face and said enthusiastically, "Grandpa, buy meat?" The old man replied, "Yes, I want a catty of pork belly." "good!" The big man quickly cut it left and right. "A catty is just right. This is the best pork belly." Ten dollars. "Say that finish, he hurriedly packed it in a plastic bag and handed it to the old man. The old man who was warmly received left happily.
Another young man came over and said coldly to the big fellow, "Give me a pig's trotter and a catty of lean meat. I don't want any fat. " The big fellow still has a trademark smile on his face and his hands are in no hurry. When the young man saw the meat cut by the big fellow, his face smiled. After paying the money, the young man left without looking back. The big fellow still smiled and shouted, "Go well and welcome to come again next time."
I saw that the big fellow was so enthusiastic, so I said to his mother, "Look, such an enthusiastic person deserves recognition!" " "I pulled my mother and ran over and said," Uncle, I want two Jin of pork belly. " "Yes!" The big fellow replied with a smile.
Going home with meat, my mother said it again with trepidation. Only 62 Liang a catty! I feel bad in my heart The tall image of the big man suddenly became shorter. It turns out that behind that smile, it is ...
In nature, there is such an animal. They stayed underground for four years, and when they finally broke out of the ground and finally enjoyed themselves, they found that the footsteps of death were not far away.
However, they have no time to think. At the moment when they really bathed in sunshine, they climbed a tree and spent the rest of their lives, only one month.
Strangely, why do they sing happily over and over again in the summer night when they know that time is running out? Don't they know that life is fleeting Maybe they are too stupid to complain about the injustice of fate? Don't they have regrets when they are about to die?
They are also animals. Why are they tortured by darkness?
However, maybe, maybe at the moment they were born, there was no complaint. In order to sing happily in the so-called "Elysium", they are willing to wait in the soil for a long time.
Shouldn't we get some inspiration from them?
Love life, yearn for the light, and face setbacks bravely.
Yes, it's a cicada.
Teacher's comment: This is an article. The author explains the profound philosophy contained in cicada's short and brilliant life from a unique angle: loving life, longing for light and bravely facing setbacks. The article is profound and intriguing.
Composition evaluation, grade four, 10 I'm a fan of junior officials.
I am a lovely little girl with watery eyes, a high nose and a small mouth. My voice is very loud, which may be related to my beautiful mother. My mother has been a host since she was a child. She has an innate good voice, and her singing, speaking and reading are among the best in her class. I inherited these advantages from my mother, but my biggest shortcoming is that I am a "fan of small officials."
I remember when I was in the first grade, I was only 5 years old, but I knew everything at an early age. My mother said to me, "You are such a kid!" "I have always been the most active in choosing a monitor in my class. In kindergarten, I dared to go to the podium to explain a math problem. This time, the teacher didn't vote for the monitor, but smiled and asked, "Who wants to be the monitor? "As soon as I heard this, I quickly raised my hand and shouted," I want to be, I want to be! " "In this way, I became the monitor of our class. One day, I was doing my homework. My favorite TV series Pleasant Goat and Big Big Wolf is playing. I walked to the TV, sighed and went back to do my homework. Seeing that I was so curious, my mother asked, "Why don't you watch TV?" I replied, "if I don't do my homework, the monitor will be revoked." Hey, it's really hard to be a monitor! " "Mom said," Since it is difficult to be a monitor, why should we be a monitor? " "When the monitor can manage people, the monitor is king. How powerful I am! " I replied without thinking. My mother looked at me and said with a smile, "What an official fan! Ha ha! "
I am a fan of Xiao Guan, a small fan of Xiao Guan.
Briefly comment on the topic at the beginning of the article, highlighting that "I" is the center of a "small official fan". When choosing a monitor, the author can grasp the language and movements of "I" and talk to his mother, which is very vivid and very good. The language of the article is vivid and natural, and it is a masterpiece.