2. Write a composition with one side as the model. When I was growing up, I experienced many things, which echoed in my mind like a boat. I will never forget one of them, even though I only know her briefly.
It was a howling afternoon, the north wind roared, the thunder just sounded, and the heavy rain kept falling like a broken bead curtain. I was walking home with an umbrella. Suddenly, a cool breeze blew, and I couldn't help yawning. I only feel that the road is as cold as a cellar, and air conditioning keeps drilling into my trouser legs. Everyone on the road was wearing raincoats and umbrellas, and was in a hurry. I saw the garbage dump opposite my house-because of the rain, I could only vaguely see a thin and short old man tossing and turning in the garbage dump with a bamboo branch in his hand. Who is there? This heavy rain shouldn't be a cleaner, should it? I walked over with questions. Turned out to be an old cleaner in his sixties. She is very thin, hunchbacked, wrinkled and weather-beaten. She is wearing a small black mask, a tattered raincoat and a pair of old rain boots. The dustman cleans the rubbish very carefully-she has a shovel in her left hand and a broom in her right. Are you still cleaning up the garbage in such a heavy rain? Why don't you just clean it up tomorrow? "At this time, the grandmother wiped the rain on her body (I can't tell whether it is rain or sweat) and then sneezed, ah! Grandma is ill. But grandma doesn't care about her illness. She picked up the broom again and said to me, "No! If I don't clean up this rubbish quickly today, there will be more bacteria. At that time, the stench will be foaming at the mouth, affecting your health and affecting the city! " After listening to her words, I looked up at the cleaner. I saw that her dark face was covered with deep wrinkles like a knife, and her thin body was like a shriveled mummy. I was shocked. Some people will look down on cleaners because of their humble position and think they are dirty. But who would have thought that in this rainy day, in this humble place, almost no one would find this "city beautician", no one would praise her, only her.
Up to now, whenever I see the garbage beside the garbage dump, I can only remember the scene that the old cleaner braved the downpour to clean up the garbage. I can't forget her. She has influenced my life. She taught me the truth of being a man, the true meaning of life, and that I live in this world to contribute to others. ...
3. Quite a few students lamented that Chinese was difficult to learn, especially some students went to the composition class. Many teachers often lament that students are disorganized and unintelligible in Russian in composition wholesale.
Then, how to change this difficult situation of composition and improve students' writing level quickly? I think parody is a shortcut. Zhu Dui said, "Simulator, the ancients worked hard.
If you are familiar with Korean, you can do Korean grammar; When you are familiar with Chinese, you will do Chinese grammar. Modern poet He Qifang wrote in his letter to his younger brother: "Beginners learn writing skills through intentional or unintentional imitation."
Lv Shuxiang pointed out: "The use of Chinese is a skill and a habit, which can only be cultivated through correct imitation and repeated practice." The experience of these famous artists shows the importance of imitation writing training in composition teaching.
No.4 Middle School once held an open class for young teachers, and a female teacher made a public portrait description. She said to the female teacher in Cut the Love Thread: "She looks like a dancer with her delicate face, tall figure, thin waist and fashionable dress."
The girl selling geese in "Selling Goose Ni": "Wearing a jacket with red dots and flowers on a white background, blue soil forest pants, and her trouser legs are shrunk to her knees, ... like wheat seedlings in the field in spring, vigorous, fresh, simple and pure." Through comparative teaching, it is concluded that the basic requirement of portrait description is to grasp the characteristics of characters and write their distinctive personalities.
Then the teacher asked the students to write down the appearance of the classmates or teachers present, communicate in class, read them to everyone, and let everyone know who they are. A Lei's "One Side" is also quite distinctive in describing Lu Xun.
At that time, I also asked students to imitate the appearance, movements and language description methods of the characters in this class, and describe the far, near and close-up shots of the characters. After teaching "The 23 rd Incident of Renbish", I asked the students to write "The 23 rd Incident ⅹ" (ⅹ can be classmates, teachers, parents, etc. ), and ask students to grasp two or three examples that can best express the outstanding personality characteristics of the characters and learn the layout of this article. The result is very satisfactory.
Parody is actually an exercise of "gourd writing". Writing can be imitated from the title, beginning and end, transitional quotation, language and writing materials of the model essay.
For example, when teaching Lu Xun's "From Baicaoyuan to San Tan Yin Yue", students are generally interested in the description of Baicaoyuan in the second paragraph. This passage is really exquisite, with a combination of point and surface, proper details, dynamic and static, grasping the characteristics of things, using language accurately, using various rhetorical methods, drawing shapes and colors, drawing sounds and skillfully using related words. The variations described are exemplary. Fragment description training allows students to make sentences with "needless to say" ... needless to say ... just ",and they can record their favorite places.
The textbooks for the second semester of Grade Two are mainly argumentative essays, and the genre of argumentative essays is more difficult for junior high school students. Not only is the text difficult to learn, but argumentative writing is also a headache. After learning the text "Ideal Ladder", I tried to imitate it again.
It is not difficult to see from the text analysis that the basic structure of writing an argumentative essay is: asking questions (introduction)-analyzing problems (papers)-solving problems (conclusions). The key is to put forward an argument at the beginning, which should be concise, accurate and clear; In the middle, use appropriate argumentation methods to demonstrate; Finally draw a conclusion or propose a solution to the problem.
In the composition handed in by students, there are many articles that can be written around the center, which are clear and coherent. But he still made a serious error code: first, he didn't write "why" in this part; second, he only made sense, or simply gave an example. In particular, the phenomenon of piling up cases is the most, and examples are used instead of arguments.
So I returned to the "ideal ladder" again. The three parts of the ideal ladder answer three questions: 1 "what is it"-ask questions and reveal the center; 2 "Why"-Three sub-arguments respectively analyze why "struggle is the ladder to realize the ideal"; 3 "How"-Call on what we should do.
As for the second question, I told my classmates that argumentative writing, as its name implies, is to discuss it theoretically. There are arguments and case studies, which should be analyzed and discussed in depth. In the concrete analysis, we should make the arguments clear, make the truth clear and convince the readers. And reasoning can be summed up as the simplest two kinds: the finishing touch and the blending of narrative analysis.
The fourth paragraph of The Ideal Ladder, after citing the examples of Marx and Nobel, is followed by such an analysis and discussion: "Those outstanding figures were inspired by a lofty goal and produced amazing perseverance and selfless spirit. It is the ideal waves that inspire them to work hard. "
This analysis is the crowning touch. "Many excellent people can overcome the troubles of failure and finally succeed.
Watt spent 20 years studying steam engines before and after, during which he failed many times. If Watt is disheartened after every failure, then every steam engine will not be born in his hands. Byron's first book of poetry was mercilessly criticized after it was published. If Byron had stopped writing, he would not have become a world-class poet. "This passage has narrative and analysis, and it is a blend of narrative and analysis.
After commenting on the text, I asked the students to revise and rewrite it on the basis of the original text. The following is a composition rewritten by a student: Failure is the mother of success. Wang Qianqian's failure and success are two completely different results, but they are as inseparable as twin sisters.
If failure is compared to the severe winter, then success is spring, because as long as the severe winter passes, spring will come. As the saying goes, you have to suffer to be a master.
Only those who can stand the test of failure are entitled to enjoy the joy of success. Note: this part of the introduction puts forward the central point: only those who can stand the test of failure are entitled to enjoy the joy of success.
This is just like the introduction of the article "The Ladder of Ideal" puts forward the central argument: "Struggle is the ladder to realize the ideal". Solved the question of "what is it".
Throughout the ages, many poets and writers have grown up after numerous failures. Tan Qian, a historian of the Ming Dynasty, began to write Guo Que at the age of 29, but because of his poor family, he could not afford reference books and often went hundreds of miles away to read them for a little material.
Later, I struggled for 27 years and revised it thousands of times.
4. Write a composition by imitating the text "One Side". When I was growing up, I experienced many things, which echoed in my mind like a boat.
One of them made me unforgettable, even though I only knew her once. It was a stormy afternoon, and the north wind roared. As soon as the thunder rang, the heavy rain kept falling like a broken bead curtain.
I was walking home with an umbrella. Suddenly, a cool breeze blew, and I couldn't help yawning. I just feel that the road is as cold as a cellar, and the air conditioner keeps drilling into my trouser legs. People on the road are all wearing raincoats and umbrellas and rushing home.
Walking to the door, I saw the garbage dump opposite my door-because of the rain, I could only vaguely see a thin and short old man tossing and turning in the garbage dump with a bamboo branch in his hand. Who is there? This heavy rain shouldn't be a cleaner, should it? I walked over with questions. Turned out to be an old cleaner in his sixties. She is thin and hunchbacked, and her weather-beaten face is covered with wrinkles.
She is wearing a small black mask, a tattered raincoat and a pair of old rain boots. The dustman cleans up the rubbish very carefully-she has a shovel in her left hand and a broom in her right. First sweep the garbage into the shovel with a broom, then hold it with a broom, and finally "send" the garbage into the garbage truck with a shovel.
I couldn't help asking, "Grandma! Are you still cleaning up the garbage in such a heavy rain? Can't you just clean up tomorrow? " At this time, the grandmother wiped the rain on her body (I can't tell whether it is rain or sweat) and sneezed, ah! Grandma is ill. But grandma doesn't care about her illness. She picked up the broom again and said to me, "No! If I don't clean up this rubbish quickly today, there will be more bacteria. At that time, the stench will go straight into the sky, affecting your health and city appearance! " After listening to her words, I looked up at the cleaner and saw that her dark face was covered with wrinkles as deep as a knife, and her thin body was like a withered mummy.
I was shocked. Some people will look down on cleaners because of their humble status, think they are dirty, and avoid them as soon as they see them. But who would have thought that in this rainy day, in this humble place, almost no one would find this "city beautician", let alone praise her, but she still did her duty in that ordinary post.
Her spirit is worth learning. Until now, every time I see the garbage beside the garbage dump, I can see in my mind the scene that the old cleaner once braved the downpour to clean up the garbage.
I can't forget her. I can't forget her who influenced my life. She taught me the truth of being a man, the true meaning of life, and that people live in this world to contribute to others.
5. While writing a 400-word imitation of One Side, I still remember that the teacher gave us a vaccination, and an intern came, surnamed Yang.
I fantasize about the teacher. Is it an ordinary public face? Or a completely different body double? Miss Yang, who is full of expectation and curiosity, is here. She is a teacher with brown curly hair and a sweet smile. Her nose is properly embedded in the center of her face, and there are two eyes under her eyebrows. They are watery and beautiful, but her white teeth are firmly caught in an iron cage.
She greeted us implicitly, introduced herself, bowed 90 degrees deeply and walked out of the classroom quickly. After class, several girls got together and started talking about home again. I cut to the chase: "You said that the teacher didn't look like a serious teacher just now. How can a teacher bow to his students like this? "
Everyone agrees with me. Teacher Yang left the image of a gentle angel in our hearts. What will Teacher Yang's science class look like in the first class? It should be fun! Once again full of expectations, but disappointed, the angel image shattered.
As soon as class begins, the laboratory is like a chicken nest. Teacher Yang frowned and stared at the speaker, saying nothing to see when we would speak. Finally, everyone realized that the teacher was angry and quieted down. The teacher called for class, and when he saw someone whispering, he motioned for us to sit down and shouted again. Then start the class. If you talk in Mr. Yang's class, bad luck will come.
I got to know Miss Yang. She looks very gentle. But knowing her, she also has a strict side of the teacher.
6. A considerable number of students lamented that Chinese was difficult to learn, especially when some students came to the composition class. Many teachers often lament that students are disorganized and unintelligible in Russian in composition wholesale.
Then, how to change this difficult situation of composition and improve students' writing level quickly? I think parody is a shortcut. Zhu Dui said, "Simulator, the ancients worked hard.
If you are familiar with Korean, you can do Korean grammar; When you are familiar with Chinese, you will do Chinese grammar. Modern poet He Qifang wrote in his letter to his younger brother: "Beginners learn writing skills through intentional or unintentional imitation."
Lv Shuxiang pointed out: "The use of Chinese is a skill and a habit, which can only be cultivated through correct imitation and repeated practice." The experience of these famous artists shows the importance of imitation writing training in composition teaching.
No.4 Middle School once held an open class for young teachers, and a female teacher made a public portrait description. She said to the female teacher in The Cut of Love: "She looks like a dancer with her delicate face, tall figure, thin waist and fashionable dress."
The girl selling geese in "Selling Goose Ni": "Wearing a jacket with red dots and flowers on a white background, blue soil forest pants, and her trouser legs are shrunk to her knees, ... like wheat seedlings in the field in spring, vigorous, fresh, simple and pure." Through comparative teaching, it is concluded that the basic requirement of portrait description is to grasp the characteristics of characters and write their distinctive personalities.
Then the teacher asked the students to write down the appearance of the classmates or teachers present, communicate in class, read them to everyone, and let everyone know who they are. A Lei's "One Side" is also quite distinctive in describing Lu Xun.
At that time, I also asked students to imitate the appearance, movements and language description methods of the characters in this class, and describe the far, near and close-up shots of the characters. After teaching "The 23 rd Incident of Renbish", I asked the students to write "The 23 rd Incident ⅹ" (ⅹ can be classmates, teachers, parents, etc. ), and ask students to grasp two or three examples that can best express the outstanding personality characteristics of the characters and learn the layout of this article. The result is very satisfactory.
Parody is actually an exercise of "gourd writing". Writing can be imitated from the title, beginning and end, transitional quotation, language and writing materials of the model essay.
For example, when teaching Lu Xun's "From Baicaoyuan to San Tan Yin Yue", students are generally interested in the description of Baicaoyuan in the second paragraph. This passage is really exquisite, with a combination of point and surface, proper details, dynamic and static, grasping the characteristics of things, using language accurately, using various rhetorical methods, drawing shapes and colors, drawing sounds and skillfully using related words. The variations described are exemplary. Fragment description training allows students to make sentences with "needless to say" ... needless to say ... just ",and they can record their favorite places.
The textbooks for the second semester of Grade Two are mainly argumentative essays, and the genre of argumentative essays is more difficult for junior high school students. Not only is the text difficult to learn, but argumentative writing is also a headache. After learning the text "Ideal Ladder", I tried to imitate it again.
It is not difficult to see from the text analysis that the basic structure of writing an argumentative essay is: asking questions (introduction)-analyzing problems (papers)-solving problems (conclusions). The key is to put forward an argument at the beginning, which should be concise, accurate and clear; In the middle, use appropriate argumentation methods to demonstrate; Finally draw a conclusion or propose a solution to the problem.
In the composition handed in by students, there are many articles that can be written around the center, which are clear and coherent. But he still made a serious error code: first, he didn't write "why" in this part; second, he only made sense, or simply gave an example. In particular, the phenomenon of piling up cases is the most, and examples are used instead of arguments.
So I returned to the "ideal ladder" again. The three parts of the ideal ladder answer three questions: 1 "what is it"-ask questions and reveal the center; 2 "Why"-Three sub-arguments respectively analyze why "struggle is the ladder to realize the ideal"; 3 "How"-Call on what we should do.
As for the second question, I told my classmates that argumentative writing, as its name implies, is to discuss it theoretically. There are arguments and case studies, which should be analyzed and discussed in depth. In the concrete analysis, we should make the arguments clear, make the truth clear and convince the readers. And reasoning can be summed up as the simplest two kinds: the finishing touch and the blending of narrative analysis.
The fourth paragraph of The Ideal Ladder, after citing the examples of Marx and Nobel, is followed by such an analysis and discussion: "Those outstanding figures were inspired by a lofty goal and produced amazing perseverance and selfless spirit. It is the ideal waves that inspire them to work hard. "
This analysis is the crowning touch. "Many excellent people can overcome the troubles of failure and finally succeed.
Watt spent 20 years studying steam engines before and after, during which he failed many times. If Watt is disheartened after every failure, then every steam engine will not be born in his hands. Byron's first book of poetry was mercilessly criticized after it was published. If Byron had stopped writing, he would not have become a world-class poet. "This passage has narrative and analysis, and it is a blend of narrative and analysis.
After commenting on the text, I asked the students to revise and rewrite it on the basis of the original text. The following is a composition rewritten by a student: Failure is the mother of success. Wang Qianqian's failure and success are two completely different results, but they are as inseparable as twin sisters.
If failure is compared to the severe winter, then success is spring, because as long as the severe winter passes, spring will come. As the saying goes, you have to suffer to be a master.
Only those who can stand the test of failure are entitled to enjoy the joy of success. Note: this part of the introduction puts forward the central point: only those who can stand the test of failure are entitled to enjoy the joy of success.
This is just like the introduction of the article "The Ladder of Ideal" puts forward the central argument: "Struggle is the ladder to realize the ideal". Solved the question of "what is it".
Throughout the ages, many poets and writers have grown up after numerous failures. Tan Qian, a historian of the Ming Dynasty, began to write Guo Que at the age of 29, but because of his poor family, he could not afford reference books and often went hundreds of miles away to read them for a little material.
Later, I struggled for 27 years and revised it thousands of times.
7. Imitate one-sided composition 100 That winter, I was ill and my mother took me to the hospital for examination. I met her in that hospital.
At that time, she had a oval face, catkin-like slender eyebrows and a slim figure that always bulged slightly. She was a young doctor at that time. When I first met her, I thought she was beautiful.
She sat me in her armchair covered with white cloth. She has a stethoscope. I'm afraid it will be cold in this cold weather. I didn't know that she put the stethoscope directly on my chest, but held the receiver tightly in her hand to make the stethoscope warmer. I was moved.
She said I was her first patient. After the examination, she gave me a prescription and sent me some medicinal materials for free, which she had planned to use to make soup. She said that it is not enough to take medicine, but also to drink some nutritious soup.
My mother and I are very grateful to her. She is ordinary, but she infected me. From then on, my ideal is to be a caring person like her who asks for nothing in return.
8. Write a 400-word imitation of "one side" in a person's composition.
I still remember that the teacher gave us a vaccination, and an intern was coming, surnamed Yang. I fantasize about the teacher. Is it an ordinary public face? Or a completely different body double?
Miss Yang, who is full of expectation and curiosity, is here. She is a teacher with brown curly hair and a sweet smile. Her nose is properly embedded in the center of her face, and there are two eyes under her eyebrows. They are watery and beautiful, but her white teeth are firmly caught in an iron cage. She greeted us implicitly, introduced herself, bowed 90 degrees deeply and walked out of the classroom quickly.
After class, several girls got together and started talking about home again. I cut to the chase: "You said that the teacher didn't look like a serious teacher just now. How can a teacher bow to his students like this? " Everyone agrees with me. Teacher Yang left the image of a gentle angel in our hearts.
What will Teacher Yang's science class look like in the first class? It should be fun! Once again full of expectations, but disappointed, the angel image shattered. As soon as class begins, the laboratory is like a chicken nest. Teacher Yang frowned and stared at the speaker, saying nothing to see when we would speak. Finally, everyone realized that the teacher was angry and quieted down. The teacher called for class, and when he saw someone whispering, he motioned for us to sit down and shouted again. Then start the class. If you talk in Mr. Yang's class, bad luck will come.
I got to know Miss Yang. She looks very gentle. But knowing her, she also has a strict side of the teacher.
9. There is an antique shop in a winding alley in the sixth grade, in which the owner's favorite painting-Qi Baishi's Shrimp is hung.
There are only four lifelike shrimps on Nuoda's paper, and the rest have nothing. I am confused, but I have no time to pay attention. I glanced at it and hurried by.
The atmosphere at home is very cold, and the surrounding air is frozen. The restaurant lights cast a faint yellow light and lit up my frosty face. Mother spoke first: "Did I do something wrong? I am still your guardian at least until you are eighteen. What does it matter to read your diary? " I ate with my head down and was silent.
"Besides, mom cares about you when she reads your diary, doesn't she?" Silence is still endless silence ... after dinner, I shut myself in my room and looked at my mother's diary, with an indescribable taste in my heart. For a long time, I picked up a pen and touched this lightly on the paper: I was a girl who especially liked to pry into other people's privacy when the weather was sour on June 5438+1October 2, 2008. Now, when my privacy is unobstructed in other people's eyes, I can't tell what it was like at that time.
Our life is always divided into several parts, but there is always a part that belongs to us. Let's doodle and paint the colors of youth. Because that's our blank.