Teacher Comments Composition 1 Lv Lanhai is my teacher. She has neat and slightly yellow short hair, bright eyes and Zhang Yuanyuan's face, which shows the unique attitude of intellectuals. She is also my head teacher. She has a magical power that often inspires us, supports us and warms us.
Once, I was a seed that had not germinated yet, waiting quietly for a spring rain encounter.
Now, in the breeze, I thrive. I am standing under the blue sky, with thick green branches and leaves pointing to the sky, and it-the breeze shuttles among the green leaves, cutting the mottled leaves.
The autumn wind is crazy and fierce, as fierce as fire and burning. A year ago, I stepped into this unknown campus with a childlike look.
On weekends, my classmates invited me out to play, and I came home very late. Suddenly, I remembered that I didn't write Zhou Ji, so I rushed to write wildly, finished it in more than ten minutes, and then fell asleep happily. I handed in my weekly diary the next morning and did nothing all day. On the third day of math class, Zhou Ji sent it. A line of scarlet comment on writing stood out: "You have misspelled so many words, which are too sloppy ..." I was lost in thought, when a female middle school student raised her voice: "Today, everyone is very serious about Zhou Ji, but only a few people deal with it rashly ..." When she said this, she gave me a look, and my face immediately burned and my head was buried. The mezzo-soprano rang again: "A person's vision should be higher, and the details determine success or failure ..." The teacher didn't talk much, but every sentence was earnest. Now, I have been relieved and gradually got rid of my carelessness. The autumn wind in September blew away dead branches and leaves. Although the process is very painful, you can put on elegant starlight afterwards.
The spring breeze is very light and soft, and it will pass as soon as it blows. I didn't get good grades in the final exam of the first semester of junior high school. I will study hard next semester, and after three successes, I have a feeling of flying high. So next month's exam, I retreated a thousand miles, was hit hard, and never recovered. At that time, the teacher's comment was written like this: "A person's collapse is not due to objective pressure, but his weak willpower ..." This sentence was deeply imprinted in my heart. From then on, I learned to put myself in the other's shoes, pick up textbooks, review knowledge and move forward wholeheartedly. After that, I got a relatively good result. Just like, if you can show your courage in those days, it is not enough to stand out from the crowd.
Now that I think about it, it was the teacher's comments that put me on the right path, just like the spring breeze in February, which blew out new green trees.
In the future, the winds from different seasons, sometimes quiet and warm, sometimes sudden pain, will still blow me and "cut" me. When I am stronger, I bow my head and my feet are full of vitality. At this time, I really appreciate that meeting.
Composition 2 Teacher's Comments 1. Although the article is short, the description is vivid and delicate, with a strong flavor of life. Words and sentences are accurate and vivid. Finally, the article reveals the central sentence, which is a clear pen and a summative language. It is short and pithy. Through careful observation, it is vividly described in appropriate language. The article is short but not monotonous, and the language is popular but not boring.
2. A detailed description of the characters' language, manners and movements. This is a major feature of this article. The ending is full of expectation and enthusiasm, and the words are still unfinished.
3. The article is written in detail, revealing the warmth like sunshine between the lines, which naturally sublimates the theme of the article to a higher level.
The music is beautiful, so is the language of this article. Poetic language, fantastic imagination, so beautiful!
5. "Reading" and "feeling" of the article are closely related. Examples of actions are touching at the beginning and have real feelings.
6. The structure of the article is concise and reasonable, and the author's understanding of the original text is very profound and thorough. The full-text language is forceful, and hit the floor's reading is exciting and exciting.
7. Although the language of this article is not gorgeous, it is extremely accurate and vivid, and the emotion is rich and true. Read with relish, it uses a lot of spoken English in life, making the article more natural. The end of the article is clear, implicit and meaningful. This composition is novel in material, brilliant in conception and vivid in language, and reveals a fresh breath of life and children's interest between the lines.
8. This article narrates the events of … in the order of events. The language is fluent and the level is clear, which seems to be enjoyable from beginning to end.
9. The content is close to modern life, novel and unique, grasping the pulse of the times and showing the flavor of the times.
10, with clear context, strong sense of hierarchy and orderly narration.
1 1, with appropriate details, clear focus and clear thinking. Carefully selected, the material seems to be tailor-made for the theme.
12, the narrative is detailed and concrete, the details are vivid and vivid, the characters are vivid and prominent, and the images are full and vivid.
13, setting off the characters' emotions with the environment, blending scenes, feeling in the scene, and scenery in the scene.
14, rich in imagination, strange in conception and not divorced from the truth of life, binds the association of life, broadens the reader's thinking and makes people feel lively and interesting.
15, the scenery description is vivid, the words and sentences are appropriate, and the scenes are in harmony with each other, just like a vivid sketch painting presented to the readers.
The teacher commented on the composition 3 1. The plot is lively and interesting, the narrative is clear and complete, and it also shows the author's intelligence and wit, full of family life interest, and his writing is smooth and lively.
2. You are very good at grasping the characteristics of things and describing them in detail, which shows that … emotion permeates between words.
The article is very convincing and thought-provoking. From the point of view of writing, the plot is vivid and the article is ups and downs, which is very enlightening to read.
4. The theme is concise, profound and powerful, and shocking.
5. The use of accurate and rigorous words, plain and natural language, personification and other rhetorical devices makes the article even more icing on the cake.
6. The main feature of this composition is that it narrates specific details, vividly describes true feelings, and uses rhetorical devices such as metaphor and personification to write … vividly, expressing … love for ….
7. The full-text language is vivid and accurate, and the plot is wonderful and tortuous, which seems to bring readers into a happy paradise and make people smile. The full text is easy to understand and interesting.
8. The article has clear clues and prominent themes. The poetic language at the beginning and end of the article is full of imagination and rhythmic beauty, which makes people want to read and love to read.
9. Although it is a trivial matter, the author describes it vividly. An indispensable pen at the end highlights the theme of the article.
10. The vivid description of details reveals the inner world of the characters on the contrary, which is the success of this paper.
1 1. This article has novel materials ... This story is full of rural life, which is very interesting for children and makes people feel happy and comfortable after reading it.
12. This article is based on real life, with appropriate and novel materials, clear paragraphs, clear transition, natural interest and strong readability.
13. The full text has a bright rhythm, fresh language and always full of humor. Reading is interesting.
14. The vivid and detailed description of ... is one of the characteristics of this article, which also reflects the author's keen and meticulous observation, which is a major factor for the success of this article.
15. This article is vivid and rich in content, novel in language and unique and reasonable in structure.
16. This article is a mature narrative work. It shows the whole process of the experiment with accurate and fluent language, which is full of fun. The author observes and narrates in an orderly way.
17. The description of experimental phenomena can be to the point. The article is detailed and comprehensive, reflecting the interest and knowledge of natural science, and it is very interesting to read.
18. The beginning of the article is very clear, which plays a leading role in the full text. A few words at the end show the author's lofty ideal and firm confidence in exploring the mysteries of science, and inspire people to forge ahead.
19. There are three main successes in this paper: first, pay attention to choosing the best fragment to write; Secondly, the words are accurate; Third, the structure of the article is compact.
20. This paper focuses on the following centers ... The material language is accurate, vivid and vivid, and the content is extremely rich and specific, which is a successful work.
Teacher's Comments on Composition 4 In the upcoming primary school life, there are joys and sorrows, smiles and tears, flowers and fruits, and fragrant colors. And the most unforgettable teacher.
Among many teachers, Mr. Lu is the most unforgettable one for me. Although she has been teaching us since the fifth grade, it seems that she and her classmates have been together for more than ten years.
Teacher Lu is very beautiful I liked her from the moment she walked into the classroom. She has blond curly hair with hooks, bright eyes with red glasses and a smooth mouth under her nose.
Primary school 1-4 grade I feel I have no writing ability. It was not until the fifth grade that I was discovered by Teacher Lu that I was good at writing. And teacher Lu also found the advantages of most students in the class.
Teacher Lu is very gentle and kind to every student. No matter whether students study well or not, they tell him questions patiently and never laugh at them. Treat every student as your own child. In order to do a good job in the class, she spent her own money to buy certificates to encourage students to study hard. She praised and encouraged students to do good deeds. If a student makes a mistake, she should know the mistake, and don't make this mistake and similar mistakes next time. Everyone did well in the last midterm. Teacher Lu not only praised everyone, but also specially took out a Chinese class to take everyone to play on the playground.
Teacher Lu, I am one of the peaches and plums you planted yourself. My germination and growth are bathed in your sunshine and rain, and flowers repay nature with rich fragrance. I will thank you for making progress in my study! Spring rain, which dyed the world green, disappeared silently in the soil. Teacher Lu, you are the spring rain in our hearts, and we will always thank you.
I love you, Mr. Lu!
Comment: In this article, the author introduced one of his teachers to us and thanked him. The disadvantage of the article is that the details are inappropriate and the center is not prominent. For example, Teacher Lu found that "I" was well written and too brief. I hope the author will pay more attention to this problem.
Comments by composition teachers 5 Abstract: Comments are an important part of composition teaching. Some Chinese teachers criticized the revision carefully, and emphatically pointed out the shortcomings in the composition, which took a lot of effort and gained little. So, how can students appreciate your feelings, accept them with an open mind, and let comments play its role? The author believes that composition evaluation should be full of deep love, more guidance and less blame; More respect and less criticism; More understanding, less indifference; More expectations, less emptiness.
Keywords: comments; Encourage; Stimulation; Democracy; Character; Understand; Happiness; promote
Composition teaching determines the teaching effect of Chinese subject to a great extent; Whether a student can write a good composition depends largely on the guidance and evaluation of the composition by the Chinese teacher; The teacher's evaluation directly depends on the cultivation of students' interest in learning and the improvement of their writing ability. This situation determines that the teacher will play a "referee" role. Therefore, when writing comments, teachers must be objective and fair, judge by articles, and never judge by people with colored eyes.
Rosenthal, an American psychologist, pointed out: Teachers' expectations of students will multiply students' self-esteem and self-confidence, and generate a progressive motivation to constantly change and improve themselves. They will unconsciously study harder in action, and the result is rapid progress. Therefore, in composition evaluation, teachers should use a lot of inspiring words, that is, try to find out the bright spots in students' compositions, even if only one word is used accurately, one sentence is written vividly, and one method is used properly ... it is necessary to mark it and applaud it in order to achieve the expected effect.
1. More guidance, less blame.
"Off topic" is the result of students' habit of writing and carelessness. In fact, as long as students don't miss every word when reviewing the questions, they can think clearly about "who should I tell and what is it?" Don't worry about nothing to write.
Once, I assigned the composition "I have a dream in my heart" and asked to write a narrative of not less than 600 words. When correcting the composition, a student wrote a lyric essay. This is a mistake in principle. I was so angry that I immediately ran to the battlefield, because I couldn't see the topic clearly and rewrote it. On reflection, I'm afraid there is something wrong. I patiently gave the following instructions: this time I asked to write a narrative, and you have to explain "who?" What dream? Why do you have such a dream? Did you put it into action? Has it been realized? " Answer these questions selectively and you can do it. Later, he made up an article, which I found to be his most definite writing purpose so far. The charm of comments is so great!
2. More respect and less criticism.
"Graffiti" has become a common problem among middle school students. In fact, this can't be entirely blamed on the students. Nowadays, students have a heavy academic burden and can't finish the exercises every day. We should really consider the problem from the perspective of students, and occasionally perfunctory once or twice. We will adopt a tolerant and understanding attitude, and our classmates will certainly appreciate you. Of course, we do this not only to please and cater to students, but also to give them sincere respect and get unexpected results.
Once, a boy who likes playing basketball put his composition book on my desk alone. It's obviously a late composition. After opening it, I found that the handwriting was scrawled and the changes were even more unsightly. I held back my anger. First of all, I wrote, "Thank you for finishing your homework on time in your busy schedule." Then he calmed down and read his composition carefully, and found that in the theme of "Memories of Love", he caught his mother's words, "Son, can I see you off?" "Don't be nervous, mom will always be waiting for you outside!" The simple two sentences show the mother's good intentions and are very delicate. So I wrote this comment in the second line: "You are strong on the outside, but you can be so delicate on the inside. You can feel your mother's love with your heart, and I believe you can also feel the teacher's mood at the moment. I look forward to your change! " After that, I also read his article as a model essay among my classmates, and greatly appreciated his "meticulous" personality.
Sure enough, this comment made the students feel a kind of respected happiness, and this patterned reading made him feel the joy of success, prompting him to change his mind and strive for perfection. He can not only hand in his homework in time, but also have a dignified font, a neat roll and a fine description.
3. Be more understanding and less indifferent.
It is easy for students to express their true feelings in their compositions, which is also the basic requirement of our writing, and it is difficult to be valuable. Now, due to exam-taking reasons and sensitive issues in adolescence, 99% of students dare not express their true emotional experiences in their compositions, but present some pessimistic, negative, world-weary and confused works. At this time, as a teacher, we must put aside the pros and cons of writing, guide students in time, and conduct "heart-to-heart evaluation."
I remember in a weekend essay without a theme, a boy boldly reviewed the plot of his affair with his girlfriend, and then mercilessly scolded him for breaking up with him. These words are really hard to read. At that time, I was surprised not only by his bold disclosure, but also by his personal attacks on people, which shows his resentment and excitement when writing this article. So I think it is necessary for me to have an in-depth heart-to-heart talk with him, as an experienced person to smooth his broken heart and let him know his own way of being a man, especially the way of being a gentleman. So I wrote: "First of all, the teacher is very grateful for your trust in me and sharing such a personal and frustrating thing with me;" Secondly, I feel sorry for your brokenhearted. After all, you used to be so happy, but love must be two of a kind to be happy for a long time. (omit some appearances here) ... and, as a man, you have to be able to afford it ... people give you up, which means you still have room for improvement. Finally, I hope you can' be lenient with others and be strict with yourself' and get out of this shadow as soon as possible. "It didn't take long for him to review his preparation energetically and enter high school.
Composition evaluation is a bridge between teachers and children.
4. More expectations, less emptiness
"Fluent sentences", "clear theme" and "complete structure" have almost become common words in composition evaluation. These adult sentences don't conform to the characteristics of children's physical and mental development at all, and they don't work.
We ask students to have individuality in their writing language and "speak in their own words", but students like imitation very much. This is also a good method. What impressed me deeply was that a girl wrote a family composition imitating the structure of Yu Guangzhong's Homesickness. The sentences are fluent, the theme is clear and the structure is complete. I wrote such a comment: "You are the successor of Yu Guangzhong's writing style. I believe that you read widely today and imitate famous people, and you will be able to stand on your own feet and achieve everyone in the future! " Indeed, these words played an unprecedented role ―― after that, the student read Xi Murong's Invitation to Life and wrote several articles about roads, time and students ... She always surprised me.
Language is an art, and personalized comments can stimulate students' writing enthusiasm, make students gush out their writing wisdom and bring us unprecedented happiness. Let's be more careful, patient and warm in comments, and be a happy teacher who makes students respect and make themselves comfortable.
refer to
[1] Democracy and Education (Li Zhenxi)
[2] "Appreciate Your Students", (edited by Meng Fanhua)
[3] "Composition Thinking", (edited by Wang Siyong)
Teacher's comments on the composition 6 1. This article has chosen a brand-new angle to let your thoughts run freely here, which is your greatest success. What the teacher wants to remind you is that when dealing with the world, there are always some rules that we need to grasp, so that your thoughts will be more profound and you will always receive the effect of "seeing the world through dripping water".
Such beautiful handwriting and clear and neat structure can not help but give people a refreshing feeling, which teachers should really learn from you. Let's promote each other in the future Chinese study, shall we?
Your writing is as simple and open-minded as your personality. Your writing skills are very good, which is also the crystallization of your long-term tempering. I hope you will feel and appreciate life with your heart and write more touching articles in the future study process.
The words are eloquent, and I think the article is a reflection of your thoughts. The road of life is indeed tortuous and long, but as long as you work hard and persevere, the crown of success will definitely belong to you.
5. The language is clear. You should not take writing as a burden, but record your mental journey with a positive attitude and delicate brushwork.
It can be said that your article is full of true feelings. People, failure is inevitable, and it is even more valuable to have the courage to face it. I believe it is gold, and there will always be flashes. I hope you can adjust your mind as soon as possible, and you will find that the sky is bluer.
7. It is really "writing like a god". It seems that you must have read a lot of literary works. The content is so rich that it shows your literary skills. Only by adjusting the materials in a certain logical order will this article be more exciting.
8. After reading your article, it seems that a stream flows in front of my eyes, pure and lovely. I hope you can keep this style of writing and express rich connotations in pure language.
9. Writing is like being a man. From your life experience, you can see that you are a good young man who makes progress. You have your own unique insights and profound understanding of things, which is really commendable.
10. This article expresses sincere praise for the beautiful mind with concrete examples, vivid and beautiful language and novel and unique writing style.
Teacher's comment on composition 7 Miss Li's eyebrows are black and she wears a pair of gold-rimmed glasses on her round face. Behind the glasses are a pair of sparkling eyes, sometimes severe and sometimes gentle. Laughing reveals two deep dimples and a glib mouth. I like listening to her best. She seems to know everything. Everything she said made me feel so magical and made me understand a lot of knowledge that I didn't have in books. Teachers always like to wear black shirts, white trousers and stilettos, and walk in the corridor, making a "Dangdang" sound. It's really nice! Her hand is long and thin, and the teacher used it to write us a lot of knowledge on the blackboard.
Teacher, I really hope you can keep teaching me!
Comments: This paper describes the teacher's appearance in detail, which can grasp the main characteristics of the characters. From this description, we can see that the little author is a child with a particularly keen observation. The language of the article is fluent, and every word reveals the author's love for the teacher.
Teacher's comment on composition 8 Please ask the player who won the first prize to take the stage to receive the prize. In the majestic March of the athletes and warm applause, I happily boarded the podium and proudly received the golden trophy and the red certificate from the judges and teachers. Ah, I finally won the first place in our county-level speech contest. Looking at the trophy in front of me, I couldn't help crying and remembered the past. I want to thank my teacher. His comments inspired me to stand on the platform and regain my confidence and passion for life.
Cicadas sing in dense trees, green and fat, red and thin. I remember I took part in the school speech contest for the first time last summer. At that time, I carefully prepared to practice hard and confidently went to the podium to show my skills. However, after all, it is the first time for me to attend a speech by so many people. I can't help being flustered under the eyes of the public. I was so sweaty that I forgot my speech. As you can imagine, I entered the competition with confidence, but failed. My self-confidence suddenly dropped to freezing point, and I became depressed and even listless in class. The teacher seemed to see my difference, so he arranged a weekly diary for us to write down our recent unhappiness.
So I expressed my resentment in my weekly diary. Unexpectedly, the day after Zhou Ji was handed in, the teacher called me to the office and said, I see you are absent-minded recently. You really said it in Zhou Ji. The failure of the game affected your mood. Today, I want to tell you cautiously that there will be another speech contest at school next year. I decided to recommend you to attend again. I hope you will remember my comments and don't let me down.
Then he gave me a weekly diary. When I opened it, I wrote an exciting sentence. Bamboo shoots become bamboo when they fall, and fish become dragons when they run around. I excitedly wrote the teacher's comments on the title page of my diary, and secretly vowed that I must be on the podium.
In this way, I was moved and looked forward to another speech contest at school. In the competition, I learned the last lesson, calmly plunged into the competition, and finally won the first place in the whole school. The teacher talked to me again, and I was recommended to the county to participate in the finals. Today, I finally completed my mission and achieved success. Can I not get excited A good word, a thousand dollars is not easy. Thanks for the teacher's comments, which made me feel lifeless.
When you step into the school gate and meet the challenge of knowledge, who will teach you how to study? Who patted you on the shoulder and praised you when you got good grades? Who will touch your hair and point out your shortcomings when your grades are not satisfactory? It's the teacher
The teacher has a pair of unique hands.
The math teacher's hand is as magical as a magician, and it can be like magic. With the four symbols of+,-,× and \ and 10 Arabic numerals, countless formulas are combined to create infinite charm, and we naive children are introduced into the ever-changing knowledge hall. The math teacher cultivated our thinking ability with these hands.
Chinese teacher's hand can write neat pinyin letters, let us know new words; Can write beautiful Chinese characters, let's imitate and practice; Can write vivid and fluent sentences, so that we can read aloud and learn ... Chinese teachers provide us with rich spiritual food with hard-working hands and cultivate our reading ability, composition ability and language ability.
The art teacher's hands are amazing. You can "pick" spring flowers in winter; In summer, you can "pick" the fruits of autumn; The beautiful scenery in the distance can also be "moved" to a piece of white paper at any time ... The art teacher cultivated our aesthetic interest with dexterous and magical hands.
Ah, the teacher has a pair of selfless hands! Winter: The teacher's hands are red with cold, and he corrects our homework. It's so serious. Midsummer: In the scorching sun, the teacher came to the classroom without wiping the sweat from his face, and still worked on the blackboard with his hardworking hands. ...
Teacher's hand! Like a superb sculptor, he is smart, magical and full of wisdom. I praised the teacher's hand.
Comment: This article mainly introduces The Teacher's Hand to readers. In the process of writing, the author can grasp the teaching characteristics of teachers in various subjects and describe them, which is the success of this paper. The article is coherent, with appropriate details, and the end is straightforward, expressing praise for the teacher's hand.
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