The upstairs said; "No matter what you write, it always feels too perfect, a kind of untouchable beauty that looks pleasing to the eye but is not tempted." . It just means that you have grasped the characteristics of the lotus and successfully described its sublimity and charm-but don't be ridiculous.
But as a reader, I want to express my views as an exchange. Please don't take it amiss if there is any difference.
The first sentence, written about the birth of the lotus, has a slightly dull rhythm, and the straightforward writing gives people less imagination.
In the second sentence, lotus flowers are generally described by Qing and Qian, but Li rarely describes them.
In the third sentence, the word "sai" seems a bit stiff, which is not in line with the character of lotus. Lotus is famous for its lofty.
Fourth, the fifth sentence is the most wonderful two sentences in the whole poem, which vividly describes the god and rhyme of lotus flowers and is impeccable.
The sixth sentence, metaphor needs to be discussed. Phoenix and lotus together give people two completely different feelings. Compared with lotus, Phoenix is a bit unsatisfactory.
Teach the axe to swim. Hmm. How interesting