Teacher Pi Chai's evaluation: I have written "Master Hongyi" before, but it is far from it.
This aroused my great interest, and I intend to disassemble the road of learning from this article.
1. Topic selection
The story about Master Hongyi is always talked about by everyone. As a celebrity, there are different opinions about why he became a monk.
This paper combines fasting, a relatively novel and non-mainstream communication angle, to fully satisfy readers' curiosity.
Step 2: Materials
The teacher has repeatedly stressed that the thickness of material accumulation determines the depth of literary foundation.
Even thinking and brushing Tik Tok every day should be regarded as collecting materials. It seems that you must greatly improve your "search business".
In this article, it really shows that reporter Li Man's material collection is solid.
The content of the whole article is vivid, and a lot of details are enough to deserve the word "reveal".
Besides the content of fasting, we can learn from the fragment of "fasting diary" written by Mr. Li Shutong at that time.
At the same time, it also describes many stories of many friends.
When reading a story, it's like watching a movie. Every story is staged in front of your eyes.
3. Title
Fully arouse the interest of readers.
Such as "fasting" and "great physical and mental changes", people want to know what happened.
The general public knows Master Hongyi's Buddhist tonsure, but the title says "I swear to convert to Japan", which attracts everyone's attention.
So a good title is half the battle.
begin
The article begins with an unconventional perspective: the possibility of the connection between becoming a monk and fasting.
Make readers willing to read on and find the answer.
5. Trunk line
The rope that binds all the firewood together is naturally a "fast".
The whole process is connected, and the reader's attention is completely borne by the author.
The origin of fasting
My first contact with fasting was through my good friend Xia Mianzun. I learned about the benefits of fasting and began to prepare for it.
Only then did I realize that Li Shutong had been plagued by neurasthenia and many other physical diseases.
It is for this reason that Li Shutong was pushed to fast. Without thinking about it, I became attached to Hupao Temple and finally went to Buddhism.
This part of Li Man's introduction is very detailed. Besides knowing more about the little-known background, it also depicts Mr. Li Shutong's earnest and low-key character.
Fasting process
Author Li Man divided it into three stages, namely, food reduction period, formal fasting period and food recovery period.
At different stages, Mr. Li Shutong's progress changed from physical state to thought and spirit.
Readers' mood is either surprise, magic or joy, and finally they can get a glimpse of why Mr. Li Shutong can enter a higher spiritual realm.
It was also during the fast that I had the idea of conversion, but I almost converted to Shinrikyo in Japan, which was influenced by my Japanese wife.
At this time, another puzzle of "revealing the secrets of the log" was also solved. Facts have proved that Li Shutong's decision to become a monk was not sudden.
End of fasting
Returning to the world of mortals after fasting, even Xia Mianzun, a good friend who once introduced him to fasting, felt that "he and he are separated spiritually" after reunion.
Through the author's writing, we know that Mr. Li Shutong has decided to become a monk at this time.
Through correspondence with friends, a deadline has even been drawn up. But I waited another year or two. Why?
Because "he hasn't finished everything yet."
Once again, through a lot of materials, the author restores how Mr. Li Shutong arranged his wife, children and friends and accomplished what he promised.
Mr. Wang's personality characteristics are also fully displayed between the lines of the author.
end
Finally, it ended with Mr Li Shutong becoming a monk.
It's a short number, but it seems to come to an abrupt end. I want to say that I'm still resting-