You must not know who Pippi is in the title! That is a special puppy. On the day of Tomb-Sweeping Day, I finished my homework and had nothing to do. I accompanied my aunt downstairs for a walk. We came to another community with so many fitness equipment. As soon as I got there, I ran to my favorite game-swinging. I was playing on the swing, and another one attracted me-I saw an old man walking with his pet dog in front. I saw the old man peel off a melon seed in his hand, and the dog walked sadly to the old man. Raise your front paws and swing up and down together. Listen to the master, he is thanking you. Come forward and ask, it turns out that this dog is called Pippi. Very cute. I also want it to thank me, but I don't have melon seeds. Smart me, holding a fist. Pippi will be here in a minute. Thank you. Ha ha! It was taken in. Teacher's comment: The little author introduced a lovely puppy in the article. This puppy belongs to an old man's family. Very clever, but also very simple and lovely, cheated by the little author. In the article, the author tells the process of knowing Pippi, but does not introduce Pippi in detail. What is it like? It is suggested that the little author introduce it. "I have nothing to do after I finish my homework. I accompanied my aunt downstairs for a walk, and the period was changed to a comma. There was another one that attracted me-I saw an old man walking with his pet dog. The suggestion was changed to "A picture attracted me-I saw an old man walking with his pet dog." The dog walked slowly towards grandpa "was changed to" The dog walked slowly towards grandpa ". Change "cute" to "cute".