[Introduction]
03? Chengyu Zhang
Five laws? Sanford
It is difficult to be quiet in the season, and its beautiful moments are unbearable.
Idle bonuses are like fire, and tired birds lean on the haze.
I am lazy and depressed, and my feelings are hot to three.
What does Qiu Mao cherish? I'm ashamed of myself.
04? every day
Five laws? Sanford
The world is full of inflammation, and the west building grows in summer.
Rivers are steaming and mountains are filled with smoke.
The grass is tired, salty and helpless, so people have to hide.
If you want to get rid of the dog days, you have to drink cold beer.
Comments on this small day
1. Although it is a poem, the environment and atmosphere are very good, so that readers can clearly feel the heat wave.
2. Without couplets, the scenery seems a little too much. The tail connection is interesting, relaxed and playful.
Comments on this small day
1. The theme is outstanding and meaningful, and it feels novel and interesting to read.
2. There are several points to consider: polar regions, cold weather and other places are slightly inconsistent with the operation requirements; The contrast of neckline is relatively reluctant.
3. The structure is well arranged and the tail is well combined.
10 cinnamon
Five laws. summer
Wan Liyun covered the moon, and cicadas sang at midnight.
Three stars sink in the North Sea, five rats make trouble in Tokyo.
The axe is full of armor, and chickens and sheep go to the summer solstice.
Where it is cool, it rains, and where it is swept away, it is flat.
12? Diandian cocoa
Five laws. Mountain climbing in dog days (new rhyme)
Get up early and climb high, and cicadas will sing.
Delicate flowers and dew, strong grass and flute.
Walking and singing slowly, crawling and steaming in the sun.
Spring scenery is frequent, and the eyes are idle.
Comments on Sunny Snow in this issue of "Exploring Flowers in Xishan"
The antithesis of the first couplet should be reconsidered. The sentences of the jaw couplet are appropriate and the meanings of the sentences are separated. The neck joint is off, and the tail joint is good. Pure personal opinion.
16? Zhong Tianci
Five laws and three volts to prevent diseases
Cicadas sing around trees, and lotus leaves are beside the pool.
Levin shines in midsummer, and everyone sweats like rain.
Six evils invade the weak body, and the dog days say cold.
See a doctor first, but it's no success to raise summer days.
[advanced]
The second best summer review in this issue.
The author grasped the hot spots and phenomena such as "yellow dog", "sulking", "holding one's breath", "upset" and "dry mind" and made a remarkable article, which was beyond the reach of experts. The whole poem is step by step, in one go, very good!
08? The bonds of this world
Five laws? dog days
Don't cross the river at dawn, the slanting moon has wandered.
A cicada is singing in a tree, and all colors come.
All the sails went early, and the tourists were urged for a long time.
Stay until the cold night, you should follow a few strands.
09? High point and scattered people
Five laws. Dog days (new rhyme)
The dog days increase the heat, and the heat sweats and thunders.
The crops skyrocketed and I was uneasy.
Balcony drunk happy, village road drunk.
I don't blame Yang for his poison, but think that the fruit is fat.
13? Chisel ice and fish.
Five laws? Be pregnant with three volts.
Fire makes summer long, and gold makes the sun rich.
Weeks are gloomy and fields are absolutely cool.
My bones are full of thunder and anger, and my heart is pounding.
After all, it's crisp in autumn, so why be frivolous.
18? Little Lord Fauntleroy
Five laws: three volts (new rhyme)
The summer heat is unbearable, and the birds return to their nests.
The more impetuous cicadas are, the more frequent summer fans are.
On a stranger, the grass withered and the child was in his arms.
Why is it cold and rainy? Infiltrate the eyebrows.
Julia review
Who knows the good wheels, the dim light baking passers-by (nice sentence. Twilight, I hesitated here. At that time, I didn't understand. I thought it meant that the sun is not big in dog days. In fact, it is to look at sentences and dialogues separately. Sorry, sorry)
The farmer's clothes are soaked, and the street dog's tongue sticks out. This image is vivid, but the feeling that the tongue is hanging out can refine the text. )
Trees are tired, there is no water in the river, and grass has spring. I like this couplet very much.
When the wind comes at night, it gets cold when sex is near! (The tail link is also good. That's right. )
Generally speaking, this song vividly depicts the image of Sanfu. This is a vivid song. If it is slightly sublimated, it is time to go to court.
Julia review
First of all: the theme of this assignment is to write dog days, so try to write as much as possible, not too much. Drinking herbal tea in dog days is beside the point. However, there are still a few songs that are suspected to be off topic in this assignment.
This homework makes us very entangled.
1. The first time I read this song, I felt very artistic and full of pastoral flavor.
After reading it carefully, I don't think the author's scenery is unique in the dog days. The wind is clear, the clouds are forests, the fog is ridges, the level is flat, and the geese are dark. This can also be the case at other times.
Moreover, the sentence itself is not very smooth.
I don't know the scene of "Xuanyan Wandering", so I dare not say it, but I have a little doubt that it is the scenery of Sanfutian Mountain Village.
To sum up, this work is good, but I personally think it goes against the operating requirements of our club.
2 1? Xiao shengqiu begonia
Five laws, three volts
I dare not love air conditioning, and the field is so busy that I am sweating.
Evil mosquitoes invade the meat noodles, and the hot sun bakes the long bridge.
Frogs wail miserably in the pool, and leaves wither.
Bloom is full of alkali, with autumn scenery all the way.
[On the court]
Comments on Tieshan Qingshi
This poem and the assignment 17 were all passed by our three judges in this assignment (one suggested, one seconded and one had no objection). Personally, I think the greatest advantage of this poem is that the words and images are common, but it is unexpectedly vivid and interesting.
From the beginning to the end, it seems unintentional, but in fact it is meticulous. From Pale Yellow Like Fire (hot to a mess, pale yellow panics) to Insect Noise with Frogs (warm atmosphere) to Drink a bottle of herbal tea (lack of skills to relieve summer heat) to I'm still sleeping at the window (hot to lethargy), each couplet is closely related to the theme.
At the same time, there is the hope of "breeze", the elegance of "blue room", the intimacy of "intimate friends" and the laziness of "me", all of which are fun in leisure. The wording is particularly praiseworthy, incorporating the female sense of language and the requirements of flat rhyme, which can be described as leaving no trace.
Although there is no surprising language in the whole poem, the environment is excellent. If there is any shortcoming, it is that there is a suspicion of using words into poetry, and the feeling style is quite similar to Han Wo's "Maid's Wedding Clothes".
Comments on the current champion Xishui
First of all, I especially like this poem. The whole poem, scene expression, one go, new ideas come out one after another, making Sanfu poetic. I especially like the words "a poem was born when the sun is red" and "green thin is an article", which let me remember and learn.
[Works on display]
0 1/ Julia
Five laws. dusk
The sunset comes home late, and the light and shadow are more complicated.
Casual branches are all over the north, and warm colors sit on the front porch.
Green leaves look for the wind to read, and idle books to be turned over.
Who is still lying in the empty room, and I am covered with cats.
02/ Lingnan Wonder Man
Sanfu. Yun Xin
In midsummer, the sun is like fire, and the fields are blazing.
The old man shakes the book fan and the rich room enjoys air conditioning.
If you can't see your children and grandchildren laughing, you still feel sorry for your parents.
The most bitter thing is farming and firewood.
Note: The word "book" comes from the law.
03/ Tieshan Qingshi
Essentials of five methods and three volts health exercise
Riding an autumn tiger in the long summer makes the yin decline and the yang flourish.
Yang is afraid of wet, and wet is afraid of head light.
If you are annoyed by hot clouds, you won't crave cool springs.
Too much blood and too much gas, first frost is expensive.