How to examine questions
This is a composition about people.
It's about one of my classmates.
★ Write down the characteristics of this classmate.
★ Write true feelings and feelings, and the topic is self-made, with more than 300 words.
How to choose 1? You can write about the physical characteristics of your classmates. He is short, round and dignified.
You can write about your classmates' interests or hobbies. Zhang Ran loves reading and is a real bookworm.
You can express your classmates' personality by one or several things. For example, through my bullying, my classmate Wang Peng defended me and helped me, showing his generous and brave character.
You can write about your classmates' strengths and weaknesses. For example, students like to copy homework and don't obey discipline; Students are ready to help others, care about others, love class groups, and so on.
5. Can write a classmate's multiple personality characteristics. Such as: classmate Xiaoqiu is a person who respects the elderly and often helps his neighbor's grandmother with housework; Xiaoqiu is also a hard worker. She won the first place in every exam. Xiaoqiu is still a lively and lovely person. She always performs programs in class activities and wins everyone's applause.
How to write wonderful
Point 1 to explain the classmates' looks, temperament, hobbies, etc. , and write his or her characteristics.
Wang Xiao is a very emotional girl, and she is very beautiful! She is tall and thin, with sparkling eyes and curved corners of her mouth. When she smiled, she showed two rows of small white and bright teeth. The most interesting thing is that the arrogant and naughty snub nose adds a bit of playfulness.
Point 2: Select typical cases to show students' personality, quality, thoughts and habits.
He works very cute! Every morning I come to school. I lead the students to clean the playground and make it clean. Every noon, I lead my classmates to clean the classroom as soon as I finish eating. He either sweeps the floor, mops the floor, carries water or washes mops, and does everything vigorously. He is really a model worker in our class!
Point 3: Through the description of language, action and psychology, portray the personality characteristics of classmates.
For example, "tomboy" slammed the table and shouted. The boys were stunned, as if they had been "repaired"! A naughty boy grimaced and challenged the tomboy: "Who are you? Did you buy a classroom? Have you been the shift leader? What qualifications do you have to manage us? " Looking at the boy who bared his teeth, the tomboy opened his eyes wide and showed her "signature action"-effortlessly picked up the boy's collar and shook it hard, saying, "Go to the class teacher and judge, and see who apologizes to whom!" At the moment, the tomboy is as dignified as a queen, and countless supportive eyes silently cheer for her. After a few seconds of stalemate, the poor boys finally "shifted their positions" with their tails between their legs.
Point 4: To describe students' multiple personality characteristics, we should grasp the key points and be specific and appropriate.
His handwriting is very good, and he is often praised by Teacher Sun, so he studies harder. In class, he listened attentively to the teacher. As soon as the teacher gives a question, he raises his hand high. Every time the teacher asks him to answer a question, he can get it right. He has a strong computing ability.
I remember once, Mr. Zhu did several vertical calculation problems and finished them in a short time. Teacher Zhu wrote the answers on the blackboard, and he got them all right.
Point 5: Write your praise, love and admiration for your classmates, and sublimate the center of the article.
You see, Tiny, my deskmate, is such a person. There is only the collective in her heart, only others. She has a heart of gold. I am proud to have such a deskmate.
The "little flower" around me
Tall, with fine eyes, he always makes people think what he is thinking, but at the same time, he is fooling around and makes people want to laugh. Who is he? He is Lu Guanzhong in our class. (★ Description of appearance: It is very impressive to describe the appearance by grasping the classmate's expression, which also leads to the following introduction to him. )
Lu Guanzhong has excellent academic performance, especially in mathematics. But in class, if the teacher asks a simple question and many people answer it, he will not raise his hand, as if the hero is useless; If it is a difficult question, he just raised his hand weakly when there were not many people raising their hands; If it is a difficult question, when only a few people raise their hands, he will raise his hands very high, and sometimes he will stand up and keep saying, "I, I, point at me." If the teacher ordered him, he replied proudly. If the teacher clicks someone else, he is like a flash in the pan, let it out immediately and sigh there. (★ Expression description: Use a set of parallelism sentences to express the students' expressions in different situations incisively and vividly, giving people a deep impression. )
In the Olympic math class, I often ask the teacher for advice whenever I encounter a problem, and he thinks there for a while, draws and writes on paper for a while, puts the pen cover in his mouth for a while, and thinks hard there. Often when we pricked up our ears, he had already done it, and the method was clearer and simpler than the teacher's, even the teacher had to admire it.
Another time, we learned to calculate the volume of a cylinder with the formula of a cuboid. The teacher asked us to go home and try to use triangles, but when we got home, we soon forgot. I remembered it the next morning and forgot it when I got to school. The math teacher criticized us, but after a while, Lu Guanzhong came up with it and it was right. We admire him from the bottom of our hearts.
Ah! Lu Guanzhong, Xiaohua around me, I want to learn from you! (★ Express your feelings: At the end, express your admiration for Xiaohua, express your desire to learn from him, and deepen the center of the article. )
Full mark reference point
◎ Selection of materials: The article describes students' performance in mathematics class and their talents in mathematics, and vividly depicts the image of "Xiaohua" who loves learning, dares to study and has high talents. Typical material selection.
◎ Intention: The article adopts a general-minute-general structure. Firstly, the students' appearance characteristics are explained, and then examples are selected to describe them from three aspects: classroom performance, overcoming problems and flexible mind. Finally, summarize the full text and express the psychology of learning from him. Strict conception, clear thinking and prominent center.
◎ Language: The article is fluent and the language is concise and plain. The portrayal of the characters' demeanor was very successful, and the performance of "Xiaohua" was vividly displayed, as if it had been seen with my own eyes.
My Deskmate
"Today, I'm going to introduce you to …" Presumably, everyone has heard of this advertisement, and one is familiar with it. He is my deskmate who thinks he is a master of advertising-Guo Haosen.
Guo Haosen, 1.42 meters of medium build, with dark eyes embedded in his eyes. He has a pair of blue glasses on his eyes. he had a broad grin on his face. Whether in class or after class, whether reading early or doing homework, he always smiles as if he has no troubles. (★ Appearance description: The description of classmates' appearance focuses on the expression characteristics, and clearly presents the image of a smiling classmate to readers. )
Guo Haosen's biggest feature is that he loves to be funny. Besides being funny, he also likes to add some advertisements. Even when drinking water after class, he pretended to taste coffee and said, "It smells good!" " When writing a composition, he also likes to start with "I'll introduce you today …".
Once, the teacher was reading his weekly diary, which described his "grandfather". The teacher read a passage and we laughed. After reading the whole article, we kept laughing. Some people laugh, some laugh to tears, and some laugh out of breath. Even the teacher laughed. (★ Scene description: With a set of parallelism sentences, the different States of laughter of classmates and teachers are clearly presented to readers, which highlights Guo Haosen's love for humor. )
Another time, after we finished the class "The Magic of Money", Guo Haosen improvised a paragraph to describe the change of Todd's smile after class. I saw him grinning, making spirals, folds and wrinkles with his hands, then cocked his face and frowned. Within a few seconds, I couldn't help laughing. Description of action: The use of a series of verbs such as "sip", "drum", "lane", "crooked" and "wrinkle" vividly shows the change of students' demeanor. )
This is my deskmate Guo Haosen. Where there is him, there is laughter.
Full mark reference point
◎ Material selection: The author selects several typical cases to portray the image of a classmate who loves to laugh and laugh vividly. Grasping the characteristics of students to draw materials is more vivid and typical.
◎ Intention: The article adopts a general-minute-general structure. Firstly, the characteristics of classmates are briefly explained, then the appearance characteristics of classmates are introduced by grasping the characteristics of loving laughter, and then the funny characteristics of classmates are described by two examples, and finally the problems are pointed out. Clever conception and clear thinking.
◎ Language: The language of the article is concise and vivid, and the words are very precise. For example, the description of the classmate's appearance and the action description of the classmate's impromptu Todd smile are very vivid. In addition, the scene description is also wonderful, although a few strokes, but lifelike, such as in front of us.
"pepper"
As soon as I entered the classroom in the morning, I heard someone shouting, "Hand in your homework quickly!" " "(★ Character description: The description of the protagonist takes the words of the character as the introduction, and quickly enters the topic, which has the effect of hearing the sound first and then seeing the person. )
It's her-Yang. She has a Zhang Yuanyuan face, thick eyebrows, big eyes, a high nose and a wide mouth. She is fierce like a boy. She speaks fast and spicy. The students all call her "Pepper".
I quickly took out my exercise book, only to find that I left it at home. I was as anxious as ants on hot bricks-running around. Suddenly I had a brainwave: why not hand in an empty book and muddle through first? I immediately took out an empty notebook and handed it in with someone else's exercise book, feeling a little proud.
But in a short time, Yang came up to me and said sternly like a teacher, "Li Jiao, where is your exercise book?"
"Didn't you pay it?" I whispered back.
"Have you made it? Hey, an empty book, are you kidding! " As she spoke fiercely, she shook the empty book in her hand, which attracted all her classmates to watch the fun. My face suddenly turned red, and I bowed my head silently.
She insisted, "Why don't you hand in your homework?"
I replied hesitantly, "I ... I forgot."
"Forgot to bring? If a soldier forgets to bring a gun to the battlefield, can he? " "Pepper" asked loudly.
"Can't I make it up?" I have to surrender.
"Hand in your homework this afternoon!" She said in a commanding tone. I felt a sort of surge of relief. If she is any sexier, I can't stand it. (★ Dialogue description: The language description when I was urged to hand in my homework through "Pepper" fully reflected her "hotness". )
After I got my homework at home, I went to school in the afternoon and handed it in soon.
How about "Pepper" in our class? (★ rhetorical question: a rhetorical question at the end once again emphasizes the "spicy" of "pepper" and deepens the theme of the article. )
Full mark reference point
◎ Material selection: The author wrote the classmate "Chili" by describing an experience of being urged to hand in homework.
The kind of "spicy" energy that is serious and responsible is typical in material selection.
◎ Intention: The article unfolds according to the sequence of events, through "I" and "Pepper"
Dialogue description pushes the plot forward, and finally points out the topic, highlighting the "spicy" of "pepper". The concept is novel and the center is clear.
◎ Language: The language of the article is vivid, such as the description of appearance. In a few words, the protagonist's appearance is vividly outlined, revealing the author's love for her. The most brilliant part of the full text is the dialogue description of the characters, which depicts the image of a "hot girl" who works hard and deals with problems from beginning to end, leaving a deep impression on people.
The little doctor in my class
I have a good classmate. His name is Ye Geng.
He is not very fat, with a flat head, a oval face and big bright eyes. He has dark skin and looks like an athlete. (★ Description of appearance: according to the order from the whole to the part, write the figure first, then the hairstyle, face, eyes and skin, which is very organized. )
One morning, as soon as I came to school, I sat in a chair and read a book. Watching, suddenly, a drop of blood dripped from my nose onto the table, and I immediately covered my nose with my hand. He Xiaomin saw that I had a nosebleed and nervously said to me, "You have a nosebleed." He's shouts attracted many classmates, who surrounded me with concern. But everyone doesn't know what to do, and the blood is still flowing. At this time, Ye Geng squeezed into the crowd and came to my side. First, I borrowed a paper towel from Tan Shi. Then I tore it apart and kneaded it into several small paper balls. Then I stuffed one of them into my nose.
In a short time, the small paper ball stuffed in my nose was infiltrated by blood. When Ye Geng saw this, he gently pinched my nose and said to me, "Your left nostril is bleeding. You should raise your right hand and then clench your fist. " (★ Description of action: Ye Geng described the steps and methods of stopping the bleeding of my nose in an orderly way with sequential words such as "first" and "later", and the image of a "little doctor" came into being. ) So, I did as Ye Geng said. After about 30 seconds, the bleeding stopped. At this time, Ye Geng breathed a sigh of relief and the students returned to their seats.
Thanks to the little doctor Ye Geng. He is really a good classmate who is eager to help others. (★ Express your feelings: describe your feelings at the end, praise Ye Geng's kindness and help, and point out the center of the article. )
Full mark reference point
◎ Material selection: The author selected a classmate to help me stop nosebleeds, vividly portrayed the image of a "little doctor" who knew a little about nursing knowledge and was enthusiastic about helping others, and expressed his praise and gratitude. Material selection is typical.
◎ Intention: At the beginning of the article, briefly explain my good classmate, then introduce his appearance, then describe the process of stopping bleeding for me, and finally express my praise and gratitude to him. Strict conception, clear thinking and clear center.
◎ Language: The language of the article is simple and natural, and the feelings are real and touching. There is not a gorgeous sentence in the article, but it shows admiration and appreciation for Ye Geng in the plain narrative.
The naughty boy in our class.
To say that the naughty boy in our class is the famous Liu Shaoyi. (★ Cut to the chase: The opening part briefly points out the following description of the naughty boy-Liu Shaoyi. )
Liu Shaoyi is a big man, but he sits in the front row like me. The reason is that he didn't listen carefully in class and his grades were in a mess. The teacher asked him to sit in the front and control him.
"Class is over-"he let out a cry and flew out of the classroom. No, he and the boys turned into "cannons" in droves to "attack" the girls, scaring them to panic, while he laughed at them. Hey, don't be too proud! We girls also have "women's heroes" who bravely stand up and stop them. Liu Shaoyi said, hurriedly with "comrades" escaped.
He made a fool of himself in class. He is bent on how to "make a big difference" in this class and become famous in one fell swoop. The teacher is talking endlessly. He plays tricks under it, or he will strike the table with a ruler, or he will talk to himself all the time. When the teacher asked him to stand up, he pretended to be shy and stood up with a red face. I think: add an orchid finger, it must be a standard girl! The teacher let him read a passage without punishing him. It is not easy! He read word for word, hesitated for a moment, misspelled for a moment, and the students burst into laughter. He still reads and doesn't change. The teacher seems helpless, but he looks as if nothing happened. (★ Detailed Description: Vividly describe the performance of classmate Liu Shaoyi in class, and the image of a "naughty boy" comes to life. )
Liu Shaoyi is not "hopeless". He is very generous. When his classmates borrow things from him, he always comes to you and gives you whatever you want. Once, I forgot to bring my nature book, so he lent it to me as soon as he knew it, and read it with my deskmate. (★ Character description: The description of Liu Shaoyi shows the highlights of "Naughty Bag" and enriches the character image. )
Is Liu Shaoyi naughty?
Full mark reference point
◎ Material selection: The author depicts a helpful but very naughty character by describing the students' performance during recess and class, as well as their behaviors. The material selection is vivid and typical.
◎ Intention: The article begins with a topic, which leads to the introduction of naughty students, and then describes them from four aspects: seat, performance during class, performance in class and being a person. Finally, the full text ends with rhetorical questions, which deepens the center of the article. Ingenious conception and complete structure.
◎ Language: The language of the article is concise and vivid, with rich description techniques, including indirect description, direct description, action description, expression description and language description, which are vivid and vivid and complement each other. The idioms in this paper are handy, which reflects the author's rich knowledge accumulation.