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Teacher's comments on revising the composition
Composition correction needs to be evaluated according to the actual situation of students' articles. Next, I collected teachers' opinions on correcting compositions for your reference only, hoping to help you.

1, the content of the article is close to modern life, novel and unique, grasping the pulse of the times and showing the flavor of the times.

2. This article has clear context, strong sense of hierarchy and orderly narration.

3. Appropriate details, clear focus and clear thinking. Carefully selected, the material seems to be tailor-made for the theme.

4. The article is detailed and concrete, the details are vivid and vivid, the characters are vivid and prominent, and the images are full and vivid.

5. The article compares the mood of the characters with the environment, and the scenes blend, and the feelings are in the scene and the scene is in the scene.

6. The article fails to reflect the truth through small things, and the expression of "seeing the big with small things" is not skillful enough.

7. This paper lacks multi-angle description of the characters, only selects a narrow theme, showing the one-sided personality characteristics of the characters.

8. Be able to choose typical themes in life, and the events are more representative.

9. The selection of materials in this paper is novel and unique, and it is refreshing without being mediocre and sweeping away pedantry.

10, you are a very good observer of life, and you can keenly capture meaningful moments; You are a student with great potential.

1 1, the language of the article is very smooth, and the teacher's feelings are also written. You are the teacher's bosom friend. I hope we can learn from each other and collect a bunch of fragrant flowers in the garden of literature.

12. Sorry, the teacher didn't understand this paragraph. Would you like to explain it to the teacher again? Thank you.

13, your handwriting is neat and beautiful. The teacher wants to learn from you. If the material selection of the article is novel, it will definitely complement the writing style. what do you reckon ?

14, great! Your article reproduces the simplicity and frankness of the northeast people, which makes readers feel refreshed. The language is extremely fluent, and the use of synaesthesia is particularly clever. Your writing style is conquering and attractive. Work hard and create more glory!

15, your article is like a slowly flowing stream, delicate and smooth. Beautiful writing, sincere and delicate feelings, very personal style. May you continue to pick the waves of life on the road of writing and make your style more perfect!

16, sharp and well-founded. Although the analysis of social problems is still absolute, the article is still moving with a kind of enthusiasm and frankness. Further research and thinking on history books and social commentary. I believe your article will become more mature and lasting!

17, it is a kind of wisdom for young people who are not deeply involved in the world to approach the complex society. The language of the article is plain and soft, and the description is very casual, as if leading readers to stroll on the Yuan Ye of the mind. The disadvantage is that the discussion is slightly angular. You know, incisive arguments can make the finishing point and make your article more profound. Keep practicing and you will be better!

18, the writing of this article is beautiful and fresh, full of certain philosophy. It's about "I" walking by the sea. The sea not only gave me beautiful enjoyment, but also aroused my meditation and association. It can be said that the sea has given me a space to swim, and I am immersed in life for the sea, making the sea a "person" with noble personality strength. After reading this article, it gives people a sense of beauty and is thought-provoking.

19 except for classes, school life seems dull, but this paper is good at finding the extraordinary from the ordinary and showing it with relish: nervous morning, fighting noon, tired night, and every time I choose a lens full of life interest to decorate it. The fresh and lively language vividly shows the positive mental outlook of contemporary middle school students.

20. This article is highly ideological and artistic, which makes people linger after reading it. Ingenious conception, using comparative techniques to deepen the theme; The plot is also quite clever, and the whole story is both unexpected and reasonable. The language is unpretentious, and the author's love and hate are all contained in the narrative, which can make readers feel and think deeply.

2 1. This article gives a comprehensive introduction to my father: from appearance to heart, from work to life; The introduction to the father is also focused: focusing on the feelings of the father. The characters are plump, real and full of life. Be proud of such a father, work harder and live up to his expectations!

22. You can associate snow with the pursuit of life. Starting from the details of life, the spirit of innovation is commendable. This article reflects your plain writing style. Who says "boiled water" is not the best drink?

23. The full text quotes some proverbs just right, with nostalgia as the clue. It just reflects your ideology.

24. Your article is very creative, and your ideas are completed in the form of geometric proof questions. The full text is very literary!

25. The author has a strong ability to control the situation. The whole article is written in one go, and the style of writing is like running water, giving people a comfortable feeling that shines at the moment!

26. As a casual feeling, your article is quick-thinking and full of wishes. The rich life experience and delicate thoughts and feelings revealed between the lines surprised the teacher. I hope you will make persistent efforts in your future writing and form a landscape of your own!

27. You are a very independent and knowledgeable student. I quite agree with you, but it would be even more icing on the cake if the writing arrangement was more compact.

28. This paper has chosen a brand-new angle to let your thoughts run freely here, which is your greatest success. What the teacher wants to remind you is that when dealing with the world, there are always some rules that we need to grasp, so that your thoughts will be more profound and you will always receive the effect of "seeing the world through dripping water".

29. Such beautiful handwriting and clear and neat structure can not help but give people a refreshing feeling. This teacher really should learn from you. Let's promote each other in the future Chinese study, shall we?

30. The language of the article is fresh and lively, the description can grasp the main characteristics of things, and the length is short and pithy, which is worth reading.

3 1, the language of the article is easy to understand, close to the reality of life, and it is very kind to read.

32. The beginning of the article is novel and serves as a warning. Let readers have the impression of … as soon as they meet. The article is well organized and forms a complete image.

33. Although it describes ordinary things, the analysis is thorough and reasonable, and the rational excavation is in-depth, which highlights the essence of the incident.

34. Although the incident is small, it reflects profound truth and has certain universality.

35. Rich imagination, strange ideas, not divorced from the reality of life. It is closely related to the association of life, which broadens readers' thinking and makes people feel lively and interesting.

36. Scenery description is vivid, words and sentences are appropriate, scenery and feelings are born together, and scenes blend like vivid sketches presented to readers.

37. Imagination is wonderful. It not only comes from life, but also transcends life, broadens readers' horizons and is full of artistic charm.

38. The description of the incident process is detailed and specific. Although there are many contents, it seems to be orderly, which reflects the author's clear thinking and planning ability for the layout of the article.

39. The appearance is vivid, the characters' faces are lifelike, and they are dressed appropriately, just like a mirror reflecting the characters' personality. It's really called "life depends on each other"

40. The description of the environment is objective and true, and the environment serves the characters, which better explains the ins and outs of the formation of the characters' personalities.

4 1, the expression description is vivid and vivid, with few words, and the character characteristics of the characters are outlined at a glance, and the words and manners of the characters have distinct and unique personalities.

42. The content before and after is not closely related, and some contents are too isolated and not closely related to the main body of the article.

43. The narrative is short and rough, with only a frame structure, and the characters lack distinctive personality characteristics.

44. This article can read fresh and interesting language and describe things about …. Between the lines, it is full of childlike interest in childhood, and laughter is endless, which is a masterpiece. Proper details and the combination of reality and fiction are the two characteristics of this article, and … the content is richer and more vivid.

45. Make full use of the combination of dynamic and static writing, supplemented by metaphor, personification and other techniques, and make readers feel like they are in a dream through vivid language description. The praise of the characters at the end is sincere and touching.

46, pay attention to observe specific things, and expand the appropriate imagination, this is the success of this article. The article melts feelings into the scenery, describes the scenery while expressing feelings, and is good at using analogy to make the article vivid and concrete, which makes people feel helpless.

47. The implicit ending of the article is both topical and intriguing. The beginning of the article is fascinating and attracts readers. The combination of point and surface makes the article vivid, concrete and meticulous.

48. For the description of the scenery, the language is concise and accurate, while the association is touching the scene, and the scene naturally blends into one. The full text is fresh and elegant, kind and euphemistic, simple and not vulgar, and it is worth learning.

49. This article is lyrical in narration. The ending focuses on expressing emotions, giving consideration to the beginning and summarizing the full text. Coherent from beginning to end, in one go.

50. The article is meticulous, orderly, vivid and concrete, which is a masterpiece.

5 1. The article is novel in content, reasonable in structure, fluent and coherent, and naturally accessible. The details are quite ingenious. Extremely rich in skills.

52. The full-text language is vivid and accurate, and the plot is wonderful and tortuous, which seems to bring readers into a happy paradise and make people smile. The full text is easy to understand and interesting.

53. The article has clear clues and prominent themes, closely surrounding the poetic language at the beginning and end of the article, full of imagination and rhythmic beauty, which makes people want to read, love to read and reluctant to let go.

54. The metaphor is vivid, vivid and appropriate, and the ontology is similar to the metaphor, which greatly enhances the interest and persuasiveness of the article.

55. Use the method of contrast and comparison appropriately to prove the center of the article through the disparity and difference between things.

56. Taking advantage of parallelism to illustrate the characteristics of things in many ways not only enhances the language potential, but also leaves a very deep impression on readers.

Using personification skillfully, the images in the text have the characteristics of human behavior, thoughts and feelings, and reflect the spiritual course of the protagonist in the text from the side.

58. The article is too popular in the selection of materials, not representative to some extent, with outdated themes, outdated ideas and bland.

59. Although the events with certain narrative value are selected, the hidden truth of the events cannot be deeply reflected due to the incomplete analysis and excavation.

60. The material selection of the article is plain, too old, vulgar, simple and naive, and has no new ideas, so it is difficult to profoundly reflect the times and authenticity of life.