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Journey to the West is my favorite book. I have seen many cartoons about it on TV since I was a child. It's beautiful!

My favorite character in The Journey to the West is the Monkey King. He is strong, brave, witty and powerful. When I was in Monkey King Thrice Defeats the Skeleton Demon, I was misunderstood by Tang Priest several times and even expelled from my alma mater. But in the end, Tang Priest got into trouble and went back to save Master. If it were me, I wouldn't save him!

Pig Bajie is a lazy man, and I don't like him. It's incredible that he went to the watermelon field to steal watermelons! As a former marshal of the canopy and a senior general of the heaven, he made a mistake, was demoted to the lower bound, and even stole the watermelon that the farmer's uncle worked hard for! Is it really heartbreaking?

Friar Sand is an honest man, but he is too honest, and his magic is not high and his ability is not great. He is just a senior porter who carries heavy burdens, so I don't like him either.

I don't think Bai can be regarded as Tang Priest's apprentice, because the Monkey King beat him up and forced him to go out. Who wants to be ridden? The Monkey King is so capable, why didn't he take the initiative to change horses for Tang Priest to ride? In fact, Friar Sand should be allowed to do this job. After all, his background is much lower than that of Xiaobailong, and Xiaobailong is handsome. Can it be more eye-catching than Friar Sand when it is made into TV?

In short, Journey to the West is my favorite book! I will read more books in the future, write better books than Journey to the West, and be a useful person to society! ! !

Comment on 400-word composition II

A simple story, an ordinary old man and an ordinary marlin, had a seemingly ordinary and extraordinary experience in the vast sea.

This book tells the story of an old fisherman named Santiago in Cuba. He went fishing alone and caught a huge marlin after 84 days of nothing. This is a big fish that the old man has never seen or heard of. It is two feet longer than his boat. The fish was so strong that he dragged the boat for two whole days and nights. During these two days and nights, the old man experienced a difficult test that he had never experienced before, and finally stabbed the big fish to death and tied it to the bow. However, at this time, he met a shark, and the old man fought with the shark to the death. As a result, the big marlin was eaten up by sharks, and the old man finally dragged home with only a bare fish skeleton.

After reading this novel, I found that the story of the old man not only symbolizes the relationship between man and nature, but also symbolizes the indestructible spirit of all mankind. In reality, although he failed, mentally, he was a winner. Here, the old man not only represents a person, but also represents a kind of strength and a kind of spirit, which is admirable perseverance and never gives up. I also admire the will of the old fisherman in the novel. He taught me that a person must be strong, and he can't give up when he encounters a little setback, so he can never do anything.

Comments on 400-word composition 3

The Water Margin is one of China's four classical novels, among which there are many classic characters, including Lu, Song Jiang, Chai Jin and so on. . . . . . After reading so much, I think they all value it? Loyalty? And then what? The word righteousness.

Song Wu is a tough guy, and everyone is very familiar with his stories, such as Song Wu beating tigers. On this day, Song Wu staggered up the mountain, saw a big bluestone, rested on it for a while, and then a strong wind blew. Song Wu was wondering, and he heard a bang behind him. As soon as he turned around, he saw a tiger with a white forehead, which had fallen behind! Song Wu quickly flashed behind the tiger. Blade saw that he didn't pounce on Song Wu, so he put his front paws on the ground, roared fiercely, and threw out the tiger's tail. Song Wu flashed aside again. When Song Wu waited for the tiger to roar again, he waved his whistle with both hands and hit it with all his strength. Unexpectedly, the branch next to it was broken and the whistle stick was cut in half. The blade roared again. Song Wu lost half a stick and pressed the tiger's head with his bare hands. Song Wu pushed the tiger's head directly into the soil and punched it again? Big bug? Boss, finally? Big bug? Paralyzed Song Wu is so brave!

What I also appreciate is that Song Wu is a man who dares to do things. Because Ximen Qing and Pan Jinlian killed their brother, after killing them, he turned himself in to the yamen.

Another character is Li Kui jy, who is very filial to his mother. After her mother was eaten by a tiger, he killed four tigers in a rage. When he met Gui Li, Li Kui not only didn't kill him, but also gave him twelve taels of silver to go back and honor his parents. From these two events, we can see Li Kui jy's filial piety.

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Recently, I read the article "Five Strong Men of Langya Mountain", and I was deeply touched.

The story tells the story of five soldiers from 7 companies and 6 classes who led the enemy to a corner of Langya Mountain in order to cover the transfer of the masses and the main force of the company, beat the enemy and finally jumped off the cliff bravely. Who doesn't cherish young life? Who doesn't long for a free life? However, for the happiness of the people and the liberation of the motherland, the five warriors gave their lives without hesitation, and wrote a magnificent anti-Japanese ode with blood and life. As the saying goes, death is heavier than Mount Tai and lighter than a feather. At an extremely urgent juncture, the five brave men have only one thought in their hearts: as long as we can protect the good people and the main force of the company, our sacrifice is worth it. This reminds me of Liu Hulan, the little hero of the Anti-Japanese War. At the age of fifteen, she joined the China * * * production party and was killed by the enemy with a side knife, but she still didn't give in to the enemy and asked for other party member by name. Although Liu Hulan is a teenage girl, she is also great.

As children in the new century and masters of 2 1 century, we should study hard and repay our parents' kindness. More importantly, when you grow up, you should make contributions to the motherland and live up to the wishes of the martyrs.

Comments on 400-word composition 5

There are many people I like in a dream of red mansions, such as Jia Baoyu, xiren and Baochai ... but I like Lin Daiyu best. Why? Because the author put the distinctive characteristics of Lin Daiyu.

Lin Daiyu is the heroine in the classic Dream of Red Mansions, the head of twelve women in Jinling, the daughter of the fourth generation of four big families, the salt official in Yangzhou, Baoyu's aunt and Jia's granddaughter. She was young, bereaved of her mother, frail, unlucky in beauty and poor in life.

Daiyu is extremely clever, excellent in piano, chess, calligraphy and painting, especially in poetry.

Lin Daiyu is more suspicious and sensitive in the article "Daiyu Buries Flowers to Sacrifice the Soul of Flowers". Suspicion was manifested in Qingwen's refusal to open the door when Daiyu knocked on the door of Hongyi Courtyard. Daiyu couldn't help crying when she heard Baochai and Baoyu talking and laughing inside. Sensitive performance in the next day, Baoyu came to Daiyu, Daiyu kept crying.

Daiyu used poems to express her feelings of parting. She writes mostly sad poems, and often thinks of death, old age, dispersion and decline. For example, in the seventy-sixth time? The convex pavilion flute feels sad, and the concave crystal pavilion poem is sad and lonely? Xiangyun and Dai Yu wrote poems on a moonlit night, and Xiangyun wrote the last sentence:? Cross the crane shadow in the cold pond. ? Daiyu is right: Leng Yue buried the flower soul. ? It shows Daiyu's mood when she left.

Cao Xueqin's description of each character is different, clear and distinct, in sharp contrast, especially Lin Daiyu's plump character image, which is the beauty of writing. We should study his writing methods seriously!